I usually hate it when a script starts out with a flashback, but given the nature of the premise I'll let it slide. The story and dialogue don't seem too bad. I'm interested in seeing what's going to happen. Although some of Swanson's dialogue might be a touch too awkwardly wordy. I get the feeling an actor might have a hard time pulling it off, but aside from that there's nothing blatantly bad popping out so far.
I'll give it a read.