Quoted from dogglebe   The subject is still very sensitive, and writing ninety pages of "You gave me a wedgie in front of my girl; I'll kill you," will suck to Biblical proportions.

My thoughts put in print.  Kudos to you ohil.

Blondie, Just try something else that is'nt such a fragile topic.  

fragile topic? bahhh

its not like its ever going to get made into a movie anyway....

Quoted from MrBlonde79 fragile topic? bahhh its not like its ever going to get made into a movie anyway....

But you'd be surprised who's looking...

Quoted from MrBlonde79 fragile topic? bahhh its not like its ever going to get made into a movie anyway....

Keep in mind that the subject of a script decides who reads the script here.  These boards are filled with scripts that nobody reads.  I imagine that's extremely frustrating to the authors.


Phil

Quoted from Higgonaitor My only comment is that you should never use the term "the leader of the jocks"  its just annoying.

…and that’s when I fell for…the leader of the jocks. (hehe)


Hey, Mr. Blonde, I have a question and a comment. Why do you want to write this? (Don’t answer that.) In other words, you need to understand the point you’re trying to make. You need to find your motivation. That’s a good place to find the direction you need to go. You don’t need to say it in the thread but you do need to find it within yourself.

The answers to guide you are inside you, Blondie-san.

when you grab the pebble out of breannes hand, only then can you be a true script master.

Enough figures of speech!  Write what we feel, not what we think.
Sorry.  I don't think that made any sense.
I meant, Mr.Blonde, just write the freakin script.  If movies like this http://imdb.com/title/tt0433116/ get made, then, hey, they'll make anything --- probably.

Quoted from Stephen Wegmann Enough figures of speech!  Write what we feel, not what we think.

In this case, you shouldn't write a Columbine-esque film.  If you can't honestly say that you've gone through what some of these people have, you will come off as someone making it up.  This isn't like fantasy or sci-fi or whatever.  When you're basing a story on a real event, you have to be more credible than the guy who travels back in time to see if his great great grandfather is really Jack the Ripper.  You have--hmm....Jack the Ripper....


Phil

I meant we think it's terrible, but we feel it happened a long time ago and we should be able to accept it for what it was; Columbine, that is.  

Or should the "thinks and feel"s be switched around....oh well

Shortly after 9/11, some idiot low budget indy producer posted in nyc.general that he was going to produce a movie based on a story about two strangers who get trapped in rubble after the first tower collapsed.  He said that this would be his third or fourth movie and that he was sure he would capture the truth and the honest feelings of the two.

After a little research, it was learned that his other movies has titles like 'Atomic Bug Monster' and 'Dead Girl Forest.'  While they others movies had their campy movie audience, this would've sucked big time because thte story was over his head.  I feel the same would be here with any Columbine-esque story.


Phil

haha all it takes is a little comment like "i dont care about fragile topics" to get people talking. i'll keep that in mind.... this is a great board.. i just wish there were more posts from people and responses to stuff....

this place is kinda dead sometimes.

anyway... i've been working on this script and it seems to be going in a different direction then the whole "columbine thing" - i think you guys took me a little to literally there though. i should have just said "a school shooting."

i'm actually focusing more on the nerd and his relationship with his Nemisis's girlfriend. its starting to develope into something quite organic.

i'm also making an effort to not Stereo type the jocks by giving them some character depth. i'm taking the "Matt Damon in School Ties" route. one minute you will hate the jocks the next minute you'll feel sorry for them.  

one interesting thing to do is since the nerd got beaten by his father you could have him mirror the bully. something like the bully was beaten and that's why he's violent. also to justify why he gets so angry when his love interest leaves you need to have her help him. If he has some kind of mental problem and she leaves him in the middle helping him, you can understand that he's not right mentally in the first place. This makes an audience approach it more easily rather than a message that ultimately says if you're getting screwed with a gun can always help.
By keeping hte kid a calm nerd who explodes takes away all empathy the audience has to the main character.

keep in mind this is a story i began writing on a whim.. with no treatment and no planning... just the seed of an idea of a school shooting... which at this point in the story may not even happen.

i'm flying by the seat of my pants. its a fun way to write. its going to require some re-tooling when its finished, but hey, what screenplay doesnt?  i am still set on giving this story a really dark ending.

this developing love triangle between josh, alyssa, and ryan has definitely opened up a few new roads i could travel down.

i was thinking about the notion of possibly Alyssa "suspecting" she "may" be pregnant with ryan's kid....and thats the reason she goes back to Ryan at the height of her relationship with josh

this incident would of course be the launching pad for the "dramatic" ending.

Quoted from Herodreamer79 SPOILER what about at the end.... when Alex finds the couple hiding in the freezer and does "eeny meany miney mo" that was so jacked up... i watched it carefully... i think he ended on the girl

LOL. Dude, you are off your head, I love it. Only a true film buff would have noticed who he ended on.

Quoted Text That was sofa king awesome

Sofa king?