Quoted from -Ben- But what is this twist everyone is talking about?

The twist is revealed visually in the final scene. I won't give  it away here but here's a clue: the photo!

Thanks for reading

Oh okay thanks.

Martin,

I really enjoyed this one.  Excellent use of voiceovers and flashbacks, and a nice twist at the end.  

Job well done!

Wow Martin, this one was really good.

You have a great way with description and character, some of the best on the un produced and produced scripts IMO, this felt real and had a very somber tone to it, at least for me.

You threw a nice twist at the end, I had a feeling that they were brothers but it still worked very well.

anyways this was a another gem.  Keep plugging them out.

You wrote this script months ago, are you still accepting compliments? I loved this script, and its the first I've seen where no one has spotted any formatting flaws.

Quoted from Alex J. Cooper are you still accepting compliments?

Compliments are always appreciated

It's nice to see this one get bumped because it's the only short I'm really happy with. I've since removed the car crash to lower the budget but I'm reluctant to change much else.

Flyboy, thanks for the kind words. I still plan to read one of your features but I'm totally slammed at work right now, and I'm writing coverage for a prodco in my spare time (like I have any spare time). You're next on my list though.

Mike, I must've missed your comments from way back in October. Appreciated as always.

Ape, thanks a lot. Let me know if I can return the favour.

Somehow I missed this one, last year.  It was a good read with a nice twist at the end.  I think fleshing out the piece would do wonders to the story.


Phil

Thanks, Phil. It's not easy to pass the "dogglebe test" so I'm glad you enjoyed it. Maybe one day I'll go back to this but I have sooo much on my plate, and I want to focus on getting another feature finished if I ever find time.

Bump!

Another script of your's bumped by me, Martin.

Anyway, I really, really liked this script. Had sort of a "Six Feet Under" vibe to it. Very, very cool. Your writing is snappy and smart, the twist at the end was really good.

Between Open Your Mind and this, you're fast becoming a personal favourite of mine, Martin. Really well done.


Matt.

This was very enjoyable. I read about the twist before I started reading, and the motif of ghosts in the script really had me worried you were gonna go down a Sixth Sense path with it but you didn't stray from the heart of the story and you managed to keep a somber tone throughout without it feeling labored in overwrought dialogue.

I can only really echo Matt above and say you're one of my favorite writers in this place.

Well done.

Thanks, guys.

It's nice to see this one get a bump. It's one of my favourites.

Glad you liked it and thanks for the kind words.

That's cool, man. Just keep writing these awesome scripts.


Matt.