I just submitted another revision of the first Stoned Patriots. Some mistakes were corrected and some new lines were also added. I kind of took Bert's idea and ran with it.

Quoted from bert *  The bit about the money was kind of funny.  I think you could have had Washington see Franklin on the 100 -- and himself on the 1 -- and be like, "What the f*ck?"

-Zavier

I just read this. Hilarious. I loved how you managed to make our forefathers speak in a manner apropriate to their time and when they're lighting up just like any group of friends would. A very funny stoner script.

I would love to see a sequel to this.
Perhaps the founding fathers go to congress to legalize marijuana? Just an idea.

All i can say is WOW! I loved it! Had me falling out of my seat laughing.

I kept imagining "Jay and Silent Bob".

---kotton

Thanks for the read guys. I am glade you guys liked it.

Quoted from thegardenstate89 I would love to see a sequel to this.

Actually a sequel is already on the way. Wesley and myself have been working on SP2: American Haze

-Zavier  

Whoa that was fast. Thanks to Don for getting the revision up so fast.

-Zavier  

Hello!

I read this script, and it was great. Here's why:

*SPOILERS*

The characters were well done. Their dialouge was fantastic, correct - and quirky! Some of the speech was brilliantly done - and lots of it made me laugh.

The story was weird - but great! It was nicely done - and well planned me thinks. Each thing is put together neatly - and there weren't any loose ends that you needed to tie up at the end.

Patriots on drugs? Never heard of it - until Nixon created it. And thank-god he did!

Every characters lines are snappy and funny. My favourite character would have to be the talking, magical bong. I really didn't expect it to start talking! That was the greatest part for me.

Also the car scene, it was really funny. "Not that break!" - I love the way the Bong just randomly decides to begin talking.

I noticed only once tiny error. It was a form of there, their, and they're. I believe you used their, but it should've been 'there'. Anyway, who cares about that! It was a great script - detailed wonderfully and efficiently.

Great job!

Curse!

Thanks for the review Curse, Im glad you enjoyed it.

-Zavier

I can't stop laughing dude. This is some of the funniest stuff I have read in my entire life. It appears you have a sequel coming out soon. Awesome dude. This is the funniest script I have read so far.

For a small review since I'm not the guy who reviews page for page.

Dialogue flows great, the action is great, and it is funny. No spelling or grammar errors that I can see in plain view. Nice work you have here. Can't wait for the next part to this silly story.

Thanks for the read, glade you liked it.

Quoted from James Fields It appears you have a sequel coming out soon. Awesome dude. This is the funniest script I have read so far.

Yeah, there is a sequel on the way. It should be done relatively soon. Thanks again for the read.

-Zavier  

Anytime. Do you have any other scripts here on the site?

Yeah, there is one in the Westerns. That board could always use a few more post. It's called Random Pain. It was an entry for the One Week Writing Exercise Thing back in January. Do you have anything up yet, that I could look at?

-Zavier  

Not yet, but I've got a feature length coming sometime during the summer. Here's the thread...

http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?m-1148078180/

You can read about it if you want.

without a doubt one of, if not the best shorts I've read yet!

a great story and a cool band name I might add.

I can't begin to tell you how many times my bong, uh, nevermind....

anyway loved the script and I hope to see the second installment soon!

brion

Thanks Brion, I'm glade you enjoyed it.  

Quoted from darthbrion I hope to see the second installment soon! brion

The second installment has been submitted, so it should be up with the next batch of scripts.

-Zavier

This was a quick and easy little read. The subject matter isn't exactly my type of film, but I figured I'd check it out just to check it out.

Once American Haze comes out I'll check it out. Hopefully it'll be as easy a read as this was. You did a great job.

Dialogue was pretty good. Characters, for as short of a script this was, were pretty well developed, and overall it was pretty funny.

Good job and good luck on future writing!

-Chris