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thanks again for the read guys... i like the idea of the coworker calling to verify her original story at the end... but it makes her duplicit actions a little odd... i'd have to tweak things a little bit to pay it off.. but it might actually be worth it.
Mr Ripley... i just tried opening the script and it worked fine... humm...dunno. might be something on ur end??
SPOIERS! I got to open the file. It prob was on my end... darn computers. To the story (this is not in chronological order): I enjoyed the dialgoue. I found the last part where he calls her a slut funny. I liked how you mixed the two - sex and death together. It reminds me of the 80's or 90'shorror movies like Jason and Micheal. You have bedroom instead of hall on the second scene. I think you should take off the warning in your logline since I easily assumed it was going to be Texas Massacre material. I guess I'm into specific descriptions but I really didn't imagine well the guy choking the girl except when you mentioned she was turning red. You role reveresed the guy and girl. Making the girl act more like a guy and the guy as a girl. I liked that as well.
All in all, good material. Hope to read more material from you.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Nothing like a little misogynistic fun on a Sunday night. I was also waiting for a twist at the end, but sadly it didn’t come. I really enjoyed the writing though, and it kept me reading right up to the end (when he spits over the cliff and says “slut”). So cold; nice (slightly demented) touch. I have a tendency to overwrite, and really admire your minimalist approach. I think it works really well for this type of story.