Walt Disney and discrimination, nice opening.

scare (scarce, scary?)  I'm not getting what you are trying to say with scare.

love the lizard drying himself off with a leaf.

how do (how to?)

how come the cat can understand the lizards, but not Messy?

I found some of Messy's dialog on the nose, a rewrite will fix this.

Is the story a best seller, does Disney buy the film rights?  I like to see an ending that shows Messy is nuts, but his story about lizards as main characters successful.

Helio

You always surprise me with your ability to be completely outside the normal box. I love it. Don't stop your creativity. That is your voice for writing and writing gooder. The lizards were quite interesting and liked their bent on being left out of the disney themes. May all good lizards rise and conquer mickey!

Spencer

i don't know why i like to read your shorts (maybe because they are shorts... or maybe because they are strange, not like another stories) this story about lisards and a "crazy" screenwriter "Messy" i liked much better than the story about the hamburgers. One question Helio: do you like a Rum and frizzy water?

Hello mon ami,

well, again, you took me away for a surrealistic trip. I've been quite surprised you didn't mention anything about lizards tail (something kinky)

As always, you're really have your (weird) own world. Carry on. You'll make it.

Michel

This was a very funny script. I loved the kevain and Thon, they are very funny! I thought the cat character was kind of pointless, but that's only minor. Your grammar issues are forgivable. Overall, i'd say this is my favorite script of yours. good job!

8 out of 10

Starts off pretty interesting, but then the dialogue becomes blah.  Make the two lizards sound more different.  It quickly becomes difficult to tell them apart.

Hey Zack and Tweak, thank you two for the comments. I wrote this when I was in my days of insanity. Now I'm very health of mind. this why so long without a story to tell!

Hey Helio!!! How are you?!!

I just have to say that I thoroughly enjoyed your short + amusing script about these two wannabe famous lizards!! I found it very funny, odd and "out there" and that's exactly the pick me up I needed this afternoon.

I love the way you tell a story. So sweet, innocent, random and out of the ordinary. Don't ever write any other way!!!

Great work and thanks for the smiles  

Andy xxx

Andyyyy! My Lady Goonies!

Thanks, kid! i'm okay and trying to write more, and more, you know, the age comes fast etc...hahah!

Thanks for the reading and look at my held well KOWABUNGA! on short!

I love you, Helio!!! There's nothing sexier than a hispanic pirate lover!!!  

YO-HO baby!!! Meeeeeeeeeeow!!!

PS - I'll check out Kowabunga soon xxx

Thanks!  You are one of my prefered gardner that take care honestly of my flowerscripts, dear!