Hey, Bert. Thanks for the review. I decided on not rewriting this piece but rather inputing it into another larger work. I understand Phil's point about reducing wordiness; that is something on my mind now when I start writing a script. I'm glad that you found it interesting though as my Closed In script. I'm quite busy at the moment with redrafting A Night To Remember since it did suffer from most of these remarks. But rest assure that my redraft of A Night To Remember script will hopefully show my improvements. Thanks again.

Gabriel  

This is the letter I received this morning which will tell you guys everything:

"Gabriel:

I am e-mailing you to let you know that I am interested in turning your script for "Phone&Jack" into a short film.  I am a 14 year old film maker and I live in a small town in Kansas near Wichita.  I have taken film classes and plan to attend New York University Film School just to let you know I'm not just pulling out a bad video camera and filming.  If this hasn't already been turned into a short film I would love to do it.  I won't be able to write you back if you reply to this until the 29th because I am leaving town.  Please write back.

Jack Boyer"

Now, honestly speaking, I am truly surprised in getting this especially because of the reviews. I have not worked on this script for the longest time. I was planning to insert this script as a scene in one of my longer films.  But I want to ask for your guys opinions since most of you have good judgement in this field than I.

For some past information, I was working on another script previously before with another guy but he just stop contacting me. Nevertheless, I only helped him get an idea and not an entire script done. So, I want to ask your for opinion on this since I'm just stunned?

The script can be found here:http://www.simplyscripts.com/scripts/PhonenJACK.doc (I hope this link is correct. if not let me know).

the discussion board link is here: http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-short/m-1160618213/

Gabe

Everybody gets these all the time, Gabe.

Just tell him to give you "written by" credit, and don't expect any cash.  A DVD of the finished product would be nice.

I have a standard response that I send.  The sad truth is that most often, you will never hear from them again haha.

[EDIT:  It occurs to me later that I should point out this advice is for SHORTS only.  Features are another story.]

Don't expect any money from this as shorts very rarely make money.  It's more of a digital business card should you want to meet others.

Go with the credit and copy, as Bert says.  You don't have to give your rights away to the script.


Phil

Thanks Bert and Phil for your advice. I was going to by those means. I just wanted to confirm thats all. I'm not sure who moved it(but I assume it was prob. Bert) but still I will like to appologize to whoever it was for putting it on the other place. I'm still learning about how things are run in this site and this mistake would not happen again.

To Pia I would like to be your friend and possibly like to direct one of your shorts.

Thanks again,

Gabe