Quoted from Colkurtz8 One just has to wonder...What is the point?

Could not have said it better. Although this one didn't leave me scratching my head, I really don't know why it was written.

If you respond to this thread, I will give you some more detailed feedback. If not, eh. But please sort out your formatting... Please?

Toby.

When he mentioned the the character speaking to the camera, I thought he meant an actual camera. Like the character was speaking to a recording...At least in the beginning. But anyway whats wrong with using P.O.V? I mean seriuosly...

Formating: Awful! After all this is a SCRIPT website where people submit SCRIPTS...It ought to be done properly. As for the story......

I read the thread after reading the script.  If I knew that Freeman doesn't participatel, I wouldn't have read it.


Phil

Hello.

My name is Freeman Gudbrand.
I have been writing scripts for a while.
I thought I'd give you all a hand.
In why I make you smile.

My scripts are there to entertain.
Though you may find it suprising.
I make sure we're not all the same.
By an enigmatic shorts uprising.

I write because I feel should.
Though some may find it shocking.
I enjoy the critics brotherhood.
In the fact that they're not mocking.

This is not where my talents lie.
They sleep in graphic design.
Though I thought I'd give it a try.
And found you all liked mine.

So that's the end of this rhyme.
I hope you all enjoyed it.
Now back to writing all my time.
Unless I can avoid it.

Thankyou.