Hey Mark and Kevin,

Thanks for looking at this my third effort. It is in direct response to the feedback in Deader so I’m glad you read that too.
I’m glad this one got a positive response from you, it was my salvation from screenwriter’s limbo. Again two years ago.

This was made into a stageplay for a local theater group. I loved it. All the parts hit, it was awesome.

* The Miami Vice color theme was meant to be outdated and tacky.
* Cliff is based on the actor Tim Curry.
* Several people noted the awkward greeting with Joe. I can’t remember if he had a nametag in an earlier version or if I was just playing off the bartender adage “call me any name you want as long as you pay when I bring you a beer.”
* I thought of making this piece specific to SS people but liked it as is (it definitely would be drunker and rowdier)
* Mark was hard to voice for me, he was meant to be a prick

GARY