I'll have to go back and scrutinize of the dialogue a bit more.
Maybe I ran out of interesting things to say.
Hey, Bound Man... you uh... wanna get some pizza or something?

Thanks, Gavin.

Hmm. . . this was different.  At first, I thought this was going to be some kind of nothing-but-torture script.  It had shades of Mr.  Blonde and at times I pictured Michael Madsen and his dialogue from Reservoir Dogs during the “ear scene.”  Then it goes a whole different route and kind of floored me - but after some thought - I think it’s a story trying to be a little too clever.  However, I think this would be better filmed than on paper, so I’ll have to check out the movie and see what I think of it.

Love the clip! Looks good!

Congrats man!

Hey Reaper,
thanks for giving my script a read/comment.

Yeah, I defintely didn't want to do a torture script.
The main idea I had originally was to get the reader to feel like shit at the end.
Hopefully you feel bad for rooting against the good guy (and hopefully didnt know until the reveal).

I sort of engineered the script around that feeling/idea.

Thanks again!

Thanks, Dena!
I love the way the scenes look so far too.
I'm really excited to see how the whole thing turns out.

I'll definitely post the whole thing when they're finished.

Hey Steex.

I read this script a few times and gotta say, I really enjoyed it.  Great job.

I can buy into a brady bunch/manson family kind of thing you've got working.  They say it's harder to write fiction since it has to make sense.  I absolutely agree with this so no problem there.  However, thinking about the kind of murdering sociopaths this bunch is, I'm feeling that you haven't really tapped into Timothy's true potential.

What I mean by that is that for a family to butcher a number of people and, by the looks of the "heart-warming" christmas setup, still blend in so well with society, they'd have to be absolutely evil.  With that, Timothy's dialogue and character fell a bit flat for me.  To me, I would have pictured him as a cross between the average american dad and Hannibal Lector.

I suggest really experimenting with Timothy's character.  Hard to place yourself in his shoes of a loving father/murderous freak but give it a real shot.  As is, it feels like a waste of a great and horrifying character.  Other than that, really great job.  I love reading psychological thrillers like this one and you pulled it off in my opinion.

Johnny

Glad you liked the script, John.

I like your advice.
I hadn't put much thought into making him more villainous.
I'll definitely see what I can do with him.

Thanks!