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Sorry, another thought! (wow thats two in one day, I'm on a roll!)
Personally I liked the original ending more. Just another day in the life of a coked up, drug addicted, metermaid smashing, crooked cop. He heads home and the second his foot hits the porch he turns into a family man. Picks up his kid (maybe gives him the stolen meter maid radio for a toy, since you didn't have him drop it) and hands his wife a gift. (something that he stole from someone earlier in the day).
This is one disgusting person, in my opinion. Makes me think of Denzel Washington in training day.
When the confrontation with the meter maid ends, before he hops into the car he could notice a guy standing by the car, witness to everything. This could be your innocent onlooker. Billy the Bomb could threaten him with a simple gesture and make "mr. innocent" flinch. Billy could laugh at him and go to drive off only to find a boot placed on his wheel by "mr. innocent". End scene. when he enters the car, instead of opening the dashboard for a lighter he could have lifted "mr. innocent's" wallet and he's chucking a bloody wallet into the dashboard (showing a photo of the guy on his I.D. so you know what happen.
Hi Brad, I'm not sure what you mean by 'boot placed on his wheel'? Is it so he can't drive off? I'm lost man lol
Hey Brad if you like I could send you the pdf or final draft and you could add what bits you feel work and we can maybe write this together, my heads burst with it lol
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