Richard, a weird mix for me.
I'm left thinking the punishment doesn't fit the crime. No indication Randy ever did anything to Seth, unless I missed something?
Does Goth equal 'evil'? Why is Seth out on his own? It seems he'd have Goth friends.
the usual mix of high school TEENS along with the problems they have.
I'm all for asides but this (above) was a bit clumsy imh.
With this one:
Friends, this is their haunt during lunch
I thought for a moment you were addressing the reader.
as sexy as mesh nylons, Might be a cultural thing. 'Mesh nylons' sound matronly to me.
Typo: EOY
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