The Harvest
It's a good short but I didn't like some of your choices. Him being the victim is the twist - I thought they chose people for different reasons. Like paying their tuition or something. I don't think it should have been the twist.
ANd I think the girl should have tried to do something more. Talk Jamal into opposing, running. Maybe run with him.

The Graduate
I can't agree with the choices you made here. A Dad killing his girl's boyfriend - not possible in my mind and the way you build to it didn't make it any more believable.
Nice writing, no really really nice writing, but I'll have to go with The Harvest.

The Harvest - No idea what's going on here. I think the conversation at the beginning had some moments. But they could use some more characterization and there needs to be a connection between them rather than him just being relentlessly bitter. After than, she could try to stop The Harvest, or solve what exactly it is, or both. Something needs to happen. It just ends with ten seconds of a graduation ceremony and him falling into an "abyss".

The Graduate -- I think the dad's reveal is too sudden. It's something that might work better if you built up the creepiness bit by bit. Little hints that something is not quite right with Gary. Some awkward, tense moments between Gary and Todd.

SPOILERS

The Harvest has my vote.  Nicely done.  There's a lot of dialogue like mine, makes for a quick read.

The one thing I'd change is this: INT. VAN/ EXT. GRADUATION GROUNDS - DAY  It's either internal or external not both.

The Graduate could needs a wee rewrite.  I didn't like this line: posts it to Instagram or something.  It's either Instagram only or even better, social media.  You don't want to date something when Facebook stops it or changes it's name.

Also Todd at the end, the eye business.  If that was me, I'd make the biggest largest sounds imaginable.  I'm surprised with all his crazy antics, no one heard this.

Really? This is Dad's gift to his child? Bloody hell - literally. And he leaves the body for his precious daughter to find? Surely he'd make him disappear instead.

I thought Todd and Corey were both males btw... At first, anyway.

I think this is where we get into territory of: would this make a good short film? As straight up horror it's still missing proper story imh.

Lots of set up, lots of characters -  I didn't notice anything overtly wrong with the writing but the story is kinda pointless and empty. Dad was clearly off his psycho rocker well before he served in the war.

The Harvest, hmm, this appeals more because it seems to have some logic - a sort of Get Out/Hunger Games hybrid - even if a little flawed and underdeveloped.

It's a little light on the SciFi angle and it'd need way more to exist as an independent short with a message, but as a writing exercise and with time restrictions etc., it kept me entertained.

The Harvest - WHAT? Terrible terrible ending. Like you ran out of time so just typed something out 5 min before due bad. Why work hard on something then throw it away like that? You had my vote then threw it away with that "ending."

The Graduate - Oh man, what is with these scripts and terrible endings? This one is a boring little grad party that turns into a snuff film quickly thanks to psycho dad. A dad who claims to have shot a baby point blank during the Gulf War, but if you know anything about the Gulf War and where it was fought, the chances of this happening are slim to none. And now psycho dad uses that as an excuse to torture a bf, and his daughter forever when he leaves the mutilated body in his house for her to see the next morning?

Seriously, and this is for all the scripts I've read so far, my votes end up going to the ones I disliked the least. It's a race to the bottom. (Granted people said the same about my entry but I of course disagree!)

The Harvest

The mystery builds up nicely and it was a smooth read with only few issues -- but where does it lead us then? I want an explanation.

The Graduate

This has no balance, rhythm or flow. First there's this huge build up with lots and lots of characters without any clear and interesting direction to experience. Then it shifts somewhere completely else. I didn't get a feel for this material, no true connection. Perhaps you had time problems but then why don't do something easy, 3 to 5 pages… not sure.

I choose The Harvest