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mcornetto
Posted: October 3rd, 2009, 6:19am Report to Moderator
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This is the first episode of the web series that has been occupying my time lately.  I feel quite exhausted to finally have it up on the web so I'll keep this short. I hope you all enjoy it.

Computer Girl

A web series about an electronic girl dealing with life's biological problems.

First up: Computer Girl loses her virginity.



Exclusively on Machinima.com click here to view episode

If you'd like to take a look at the script you can find it here



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You did a really really great job on that!

You're becoming quite a master of Moviestorm!

Great episode and funny too. Loved Shelton!
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Looks like you put a lot of time and effort into this. Paid off. Looks great. Loved the sound the effects.

"I'm not certain it will fit my port." Haha.

Well done!




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That is funny. lol! Great dialogue. Great story. Great job!  


Upcoming:

Soul Shadows entry
Max's Circus - possibly a series if people like the first episode.


Shorts:

Obscure





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I suspect this is even better than you think it is, Cornetto.

There is lots of potential for this.  Good stuff.  Knowing Shelton makes this even funnier.

I am curious as to her origins.  Is that going to be left unsaid, or is there somebody already working on that?


Coming Soon(ish)...

"One more SOUL to lay bare...
One more SHADOW to share"


The Soul-Shattering Season Finale...
The episode you've been waiting for...an episode called...TANIS
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I really liked this Michael! You write music too?  The humor in this felt natural vs. forced. I read the blog and script. Awesome effort. More like this please.

Gary


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Thanks for watching guys and happy you enjoyed.  Two more episodes are in the works and I'm hoping to have a total of six for the first season.   I think the episodes will be at least a month apart though.  

And no bert, there's no origin planned.  I thought about it but I decided it was better leave the true nature of Computer Girl a bit ambiguous because it gives her a chance to be either human or a machine during the course of the episodes.

And a special thanks to Mike (whom you all know) and Beth (whom you don't) for doing such a splendid job with the voices.  

Cheers,

Michael


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Shelton did a GREAT job!

I feel nervous now...  
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Hey Michael this was really good.  Just out of curiosity, how long did this take you to produce as it was impressive?  Look forward to the next episode.


Check out my scripts...if you want to, no pressure.

You can find my scripts here

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It took a number of months but much of the reason for the time delay was waiting for the voices. Sally had a cold for a month and a half and a couple of times the person doing Carlton fell through - thankfully Mike was reliable and he did a great job with it too.  Plus there was a bunch of software learning involved.  The next time should be much quicker.


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I just now noticed what was on the TV. How did you manage that??
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The animation reminded me of Xavier, but the humor was ten-fold better. There's potential here and I'd love to see the next episode.


"The Robots are coming."
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Michael,

I sincerely enjoyed this, but not only in a "funny ha-ha" kind of way. I feel it as like a delving into the laws that define everything from the general to the particular and the particular to the general.

In other words, I see the correlations spoken of here and they are significant in everything. For instance, we do get the same laws functioning upon our computers as we see in corporeality, but more, the laws that exist within, exist in the general astrological order, the rhythms, the systems perceived and not perceived.

This is the kind of video that I, personally would watch over and over again.

Now, tell me, did I hear your voice say something in this? Because I heard your voice and it was like I was in Skype. What did you say?

For anyone who loves correlations as much as I do, this is your story.

Sandra
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I enjoyed this Michael and think there's a lot of potential for this series.

There's a few great memorable lines in there.

Was this inspired through twitter?  How did this come about?

Javier


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No condom! She was lucky she didn't catch a virus too.

That was pretty good. It'll be interesting to see if it has the legs to keep going or if the computer references start to get boring. I guess if you have regular characters and flesh out her world as the series goes on it could work.

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