All the first 11 pages submitted have been posted.  There were 12 entries.  If you did not submit the first 11 pages, you re still welcome to participate in the 6WC portion of this on the theme.

Don

I think we had a great turnout this time. Almost all the scripts were written by contributing members (not sure about the Shyamaladingdong one) and for the most part, they're pretty promising.

I hope everyone actually finishes... a lot of these look like they could be really interesting.

Quoted from crookedowl (not sure about the Shyamaladingdong one)

Ha! Laughed at that.

Yeah, decent turnout with some solid scripts. Would be great if we all finish.

I missed the original deadline for the first 11 pages. However, I'm not writing off the whole thing. You may well still find me in the end.

Yeah, I missed it too. If anyone wants to hook me up with a read, PM me and I will cut it down to 11 pages and shoot an e-mail over.

Finished the entries, some good stuff here, hard to judge since it's the first 10 pages so a lot of comments seem familiar. Oh, well.

Come on, guys. Why so quiet?

I'm going to start outlining on the weekend, very excited. How's everyone else doing?

I have an outline and 10 or so pages written. I need to finish rewrites of some other projects, but I am trying to get at least a first draft ready by the deadline. Like I mentioned earlier, the title is Dead Ringer and is a thriller...hopefully.  

I've written 15 additional pages, but it's a rough draft. Haven't sent anything to Steven yet. We aren't using an outline.

I still have two entries to read. I haven't forgotten-- reviews coming soon.

Stop being such a sissy, just send those 15 this way.  

Quoted from crookedowl Haven't sent anything to Steven yet. We aren't using an outline.

What's an outline?  

In truth, this time around, I feel a destination. Not an outline, but good enough to lift my spirits and want to dance upon my grave.

Do good stuff! Looking forward.

Sandra

Quoted from Guest Stop being such a sissy, just send those 15 this way.

Do you mind sending them to me as well?  I'll just incorporate them into my script as well.  

Gary

Being honest here... I thought Will would have sent me pages already.

Fool be slackin'.  

Quoted from Guest Fool be slackin'.

Truth. But there, I sent it.

Well done to those who entered, stuck their necks out etc. I think. Have a couple left to read.

If anybody wants a read, second opinion etc let me know

I wanted to enter to get me off my arse and write another feature. I enjoy the shorts at the moment, but there is a time to move on. So, having failed to turn up, i dusted down all my ideas,  tried as best as possible to choose the one with the most interesting  hook, and am working on the detail.

Every time I look at a feature I go through waves of 'this is good' ...then...' I can't work it out' and often end up feeling a bit deflated by it all.

Even deciding on the genre is an issue. This may some weird  to some but with my idea it could easily have been drama, thriller, slapstick comedy and it was only deciding that I would take it down the Dark comedy route that some of the issues started to clear.

Next I need to nail down my protag - poor sod. I have a lot of ideas for him but they have to link with the script, the tone, genre and how the comedy plays out. When i throw all these things into the melting pot, something feels off. Needs some work.

Anyway, end of my rambles but whilst I'm not part of the 'the script with a new phone gang' I am happy to be on this thread.

Cheers Folks

Quoted from Reef Dreamer If anybody wants a read, second opinion etc let me know

I spent the first week on the outline and therefore did not enter the first ten in one week. I was aiming more for the 7WC.

If you feel up to it, I wouldn't mind someone having a look at my first 10-12 pages.

Quoted from Grandma Bear I spent the first week on the outline and therefore did not enter the first ten in one week. I was aiming more for the 7WC. If you feel up to it, I wouldn't mind someone having a look at my first 10-12 pages.

Of course...

Can you PM me a link?

Thanks guys for offering to read. I just sent it to you.  

I'll be down, Angry Bear.

It's only 10 - 12 pgs.  I'm going to review these entries. I've just been busy with my own work. lol.

Gabe

April 26th...33 days and counting.

Quoted from Blakkwolfe April 26th...33 days and counting.

I'm well off course... 16 pages

I need an office job.

Mark

33 days left...I have to write 2.5 pages per day to make 90. Easy!

Quoted from Grandma Bear 33 days left...I have to write 2.5 pages per day to make 90. Easy!

Gee wilickers, with the way yours ended I thought it would be 100+!

Quoted from irish eyes I'm well off course... 16 pages I need an office job.

I know that feel. 19 pages in, outline is finished, just trying to get into the groove of writing.

How's everyone doing? I'm on page 30 and on track. If I continue with 3 pages/day it should give me a week to polish so it's not so hard on the readers.  

Mine is now a psychological horror/thriller.  

If anybody wants a sanity check of their script, in other words an early 'vomit draft' read, let me know.

I am still working on my idea, which has now charged genre, but hopefully its for the best.

Scrapping mine...and starting over...but will be done by deadline!

Quoted from Reef Dreamer If anybody wants a sanity check of their script, in other words an early 'vomit draft' read, let me know.

How can anyone ignore that! You're on if you don't mind some violence and sex. And same offer to you!  

I know you'll do it Dena!  

Anyone struggling? Needing some help or a push?

"You're on if you don't mind some violence and sex."

I think she means in the script, Bill. You never know with the Angry Bear, though!

I'm on page 43 and I need help to introduce an acid trip/dream sequence via slug...

BEGIN ACID DREAM:

EXT. CANDY FOREST UNDER THE SEA - DAY

A liquid sun bathes the narrow path through licorice trees and cotton candy flora.

Our hero swims in a state of bliss.

END ACID DREAM

Quoted from KevinLenihan BEGIN ACID DREAM: EXT. CANDY FOREST UNDER THE SEA - DAY A liquid sun bathes the narrow path through licorice trees and cotton candy flora. Our hero swims in a state of bliss. END ACID DREAM

Thanks!  Wasn't sure if ACID TRIP or DREAM needed further clarification.

22 pages in, struggling to write this one. I usually finish a rough draft of my features in one or two weeks, but nothing is coming out at the moment. Hopefully the long weekend will be the cure to finally start banging out some good pages!

Thanks Kevin for giving Johnny a good example.

Mo, is there anything in particular we can help you with? What are you struggling with? That's what this 7WC is for, help everyone to complete a feature. Let us know your problem.

As far as the sex and violence goes, I'm just warning people, because my scripts have caused people to leave the site in the past.

Thanks for the offer to help, Pia . But I think this is just me refusing to force myself to write. I'm hoping it's just a little bump and I can finish by the deadline.

Good luck everyone!

Mo, try this: one idea per cup of coffee.

So if you sit down to 3 cups a day, try to solve one problem or come up with one idea each cup. I mean if you solve even just 2 problems a day, you'll have a script in a few weeks.

I think sometimes people put pressure on themselves to solve everything at once. A couple little steps a day will get you through. The writing is the easy part. It's the ideas that are the challenge. Couple a day does the trick.

I have confidence in you! I still remember your kick ass short. You still the man!

Quoted from Mo 22 pages in, struggling to write this one. I usually finish a rough draft of my features in one or two weeks, but nothing is coming out at the moment. Hopefully the long weekend will be the cure to finally start banging out some good pages!

I'm with you buddy... We should combine our scripts, at least that way, we'll be halfway done

Mark

Pretty good there Michael!

Here's an outtake from mine.


Kyle taps away on the phone. Ryan waits patiently, checks out the crowd.

Kyle�s eyebrows rise in surprise at what he sees on the phone. He nods in approval. Smirks. After a while, his face get more serious. Shows concern even.

KYLE
What�s her name?

RYAN
Sandra. Why? What you looking at?

Kyle looks up at Ryan, with a frown.

KYLE
So, how long have you known this chick? I haven�t heard you saying a word about her before.

Ryan checks his watch.

RYAN
About five hours.

KYLE
Five hours? You sure about that?

Kyle leans forward, shows the cell phone screen to Ryan.

KYLE
Then how do you explain this?

Ryan grabs the phone. He frowns in confusion.

On the screen is a picture of Ryan lounging by a swimming pool. Ryan scrolls to the next picture. It�s of him at a grocery store. Next picture is of him getting into his car.
Ryan scrolls faster to more pictures. There are dozens of them. Hundreds. All of Ryan in various situations.

RYAN
What the fuck...

Sounds familiar.

What's your title, genre and logline?

Dead Ringer. Why does it sound familiar?

Quoted from Grandma Bear Here's an outtake from mine.

In context of what comes before this, it has the feeling like it's all been predetermined in some way.  I don't get how the phone was empty in one scene and overflows with pics the next.  Looks like we got a Scooby-Doo mystery on our hands.

An excerpt from NEON GAY:

Jimmy steals the phone away from Milton.

JIMMY
Who is this?

DISTURBING VOICE (V.O.)
Tracy or Stacey?

JIMMY
I don’t know who you are, but listen up asshole.  I’m not going to be your Tracy or Stacey doll.  And I’m sure as hell not going to stop the thunder over some guy who thinks he can bribe me with a fucking phone.  On the other hand, I do thank you for the phone and I hope my respectful denial of your request doesn’t cause you to have regrets about sending me such a thoughtful gift.

Jimmy rolls his eyes.

DISTURBING VOICE (V.O.)
Stacey.

JIMMY
Why can’t I be Barbie motherfucker?

The phone clicks silent.

Hey guys -- and Will, especially.  Sadly I have to pull out of this.

My uncle passed tonight and my mom was really attached to her brother.

Just a couple of months earlier, her father passed as well.

So it's two in a row and it's hard hitting.  My attention needs to be else where.


I'm pretty messed up over this too.

Sorry again.... but I'll see you guys around.


Take it easy.

What sad news, Reaper, my prayers are with your family tonight.  Attention is for sure in the right place.

Quoted from Guest Hey guys -- and Will, especially.  Sadly I have to pull out of this. My uncle passed tonight and my mom was really attached to her brother. Just a couple of months earlier, her father passed as well. So it's two in a row and it's hard hitting.  My attention needs to be else where. I'm pretty messed up over this too. Sorry again.... but I'll see you guys around. Take it easy.

Steven,

Sorry to hear the news about your uncle. My deepest condolences go out to you and your family.

Dirk

Sorry to hear this, Steven. I don't blame you for pulling out of this. Your attention's in the right place, for sure.

My condolences.

Will

Sad to hear that, Reaper.

@Kevin

Thanks for the confidence boost, man! It's a shame I'm not the coffee kind of guy . I'll try and take the slow approach like you suggested.

@Mark

Great idea!

Thoughts are with you and your fam...Reaper....

Quoted from Grandma Bear I know you'll do it Dena!

I'll finish, just juggling...trying to finish a tv pilot, a horror script for that contest Phil suggested, and then this. But I like a challenge.

That's terrible news, Steven. Condolences to you & your family.

Quoted from Steven Hey guys -- and Will, especially.  Sadly I have to pull out of this. My uncle passed tonight and my mom was really attached to her brother. Just a couple of months earlier, her father passed as well. So it's two in a row and it's hard hitting.  My attention needs to be else where. I'm pretty messed up over this too. Sorry again.... but I'll see you guys around. Take it easy.

I'm sorry for your loss Steven... Family always comes first.

Mark

Quoted from Pia Dead Ringer. Why does it sound familiar?

Dead Ringers... Jeremy Irons

I just watched this last night, a great movie.

Mark

Sorry to hear that Reaper. My condolences.

You can always submit afterwards. That's what I did with DE.

Gabe

I have complete writer's block.

I had a plan and I'm running out of time. Problem is,  I have a great idea for a totally different script, same context (smartphone) and now I have to start from the beginning.

I'm so confused peeps.

Mark

Send it my way. I'll read it and see what you can do?

Gabe

Quoted from irish eyes Dead Ringers... Jeremy Irons

I remember seeing that one. I checked the title too, which I always do before I decide on one, but mine has nothing in common with that film other than the title. I though he meant the story sounded familiar.  

Btw, did you write a 10 pager for the 7WC first? If so, why did you give up on it?

No probs Gabe... After I talked to you, I got a couple more pages... then crashed again

I'll send it your way

Thanks

Mark

Hey Reaper - my condolences - family always comes first.

I just stuck 9.5 pages together, so I'm 90% up for a late entry. My wife hates it when I say that.

Quoted from Pia Btw, did you write a 10 pager for the 7WC first? If so, why did you give up on it?

I didn't give up, I'm still on it... I just kinda crashed. I've only ever written one feature and that was 4 years ago... everything since then has been shorts or tv writing.

I had an outline, but then changed it because it made more sense. I just hit a stumbling block that's all.

Gabe has offered his assistance, so I'll be more than happy to throw it his way

Mark

Sorry to hear someone has pulled out but they definitely have their focus in the right place.

What started out to be a planned horror script has slowly morphed into a Mystery/Crime/Drama story with psychological foreplay. 45 pages in and I'm liking where it has gone. I think I prefer this direction than where I originally wanted it to be.

Anyone else having much luck on this?

Steven, sorry for your loss.  That is sad news indeed, and we all wish you and your family comfort and peace during this time.

Reaper: Sorry to hear about the passing of your uncle. Can always go back to your notes and finish up later if you like...

Got some notes done, character bios finished and a basic outline of where I'm gonna go with this...We'll see. Keep going, guys! Words on the page at this point-just get 'em down and focus on the clean up later...

Reaper - sad to hear. Condolences to you and your family.

ATM I'm stuck at page 25 cause I have two paths I could choose with the script - the easy one (a simple one way direction) or the harder one (couple of different directions - was my original idea, but maybe overloading it). My worst enemy is myself and overthinking EVERYTHING!

I missed the sad news somehow. I'm sorry for your family's loss, Reaper. I hope this Easter will still fill you with happiness  

I'm nearing page 45. Bill has read most of it and there are some concerns, but at this point, I just want to reach the end before I start thinking about rewrites and fixing things. I take all the comments and suggestions seriously though. I just never read my script while writing. I don't do that until I'm finished. Then I read it in one sitting to see how it feels.

Bflywings, if you'd like help or suggestions on where to take your story, feel free to ask for it here. Give us a little more to go on so we get a feel for your story.

Keep pushing guys. It's tough, but you'll feel sooooo good when you write FADE OUT:  

It does feel good. That's my testimonial for the 7owc.  lol.

And you never know who might want to film the script.

Gabe

Quoted from Grandma Bear Keep pushing guys. It's tough, but you'll feel sooooo good when you write FADE OUT:

I'm only about 25 pages in. Can I just go ahead and write FADE OUT now and start this this process of feeling good? Because what I'm feeling now ain't it.

Quoted from Gary I'm only about 25 pages in. Can I just go ahead and write FADE OUT now and start this this process of feeling good? Because what I'm feeling now ain't it.

If it makes you feel any better, you're still one more page ahead of me  

Mark

YOU CAN DO IT! YOU CAN DO IT ALL NIGHT LONG! Rob Schneider

Quoted from Gary in Houston I'm only about 25 pages in. Can I just go ahead and write FADE OUT now and start this this process of feeling good? Because what I'm feeling now ain't it.

I've been through several page 25's. I think it goes with the territory. There's no nice way to search story material unless you're a robot, writing by numbers. And even the robots would be at a loss in opposite terms, searching for what at first seems worthless and untrustworthy-- not worth a scrap of paper. Something that doesn't add up with the numbers as numbers are often known to do. Unless they manage to sojourn with the X.

Why? Cause numbers are the tap-tap-tap of the SOS. Numbers are the tap-tap-tap of the computer keys. The logic needs the pain of the letters to give them meaning and vice versa.

In A Christmas Carol:

When the ghost asked, "Why do you doubt your senses?"

Scrooge answered:

>"Because, a little thing affects them. A slight disorder of the stomach makes them cheats.  You may be an undigested bit of beef, a blot of mustard, a crumb of cheese, a fragment of an underdone potato.  There's more of gravy than of grave about you, whatever you are!"

*And I say...

Don't rush through to

The Feeling Good Part

Feel good about the growth. Feel good about the failure. Without which, there is not one shred of good.

The food is presented. The food is eaten. The food is digested. The intestine is long and winding...

The road is long. And it runs in circles.  

Sandra

Quoted from Sandra Elstree. The food is presented. The food is eaten. The food is digested. The intestine is long and winding... Sandra

And then naturally what comes out is...

Sandra, thanks for the great words!   All of that is really true, and to prove it, I actually went in and cut out two scenes, so now I'm down to 23 pages, but I don't care!  Because it felt good to be writing and knowing I had fixed some things enough to give me a better direction with the rest of the script.

Thanks again and good luck with your work as well!

Gary

I hope more people are working on it than are responding here. The 7WC is a great way to get a first draft out. I'm nearing page 55. I'm trying to push for a first draft by this weekend.

Quoted from RJ ATM I'm stuck at page 25 cause I have two paths I could choose with the script - the easy one (a simple one way direction) or the harder one (couple of different directions - was my original idea, but maybe overloading it).

I always thought this would be a great way to write a trilogy.  At the end of the first story, the hero is given a choice.  The second and third stories would be WHAT IF the hero took A or B.

The problem with writing it is that I'd have to commit to a trilogy.


Phil

Quoted from Grandma Bear I hope more people are working on it than are responding here. The 7WC is a great way to get a first draft out.

Agreed, and also a great way to get feedback.

Page 40 here, going well but not even close to finishing yet. I'm predicting a 120 page script. We'll see how it goes.

Upto page 33 woohoo

It's 6 weeks from now, right?

Mark

@Mark

Was this the new script you were going to write, man? Or your original one?

I'm actually going to try and write 2 features for this 7WC. Got an amazing idea yesterday, one that uses the phone to its advantage rather than just a catalyst. Hopefully I have enough time!

Quoted from Mo Was this the new script you were going to write, man? Or your original one? I'm actually going to try and write 2 features for this 7WC. Got an amazing idea yesterday, one that uses the phone to its advantage rather than just a catalyst. Hopefully I have enough time!

This is the original one, for some reason I feel compelled to finish it.
Even though I have a great idea for another(actually my wife's) but I'm stealing it we pretty much laid it out from start to finish.
It's a thriller, which is something new for me.

I gotta give a big thanks to Gabe for giving me the boost I needed to move along with the original.

Mark

Quoted from irish eyes It's 6 weeks from now, right?

23 Days, depending on where you happen to be on the planet...

Hate my title. "Smart Phones, Stupid People" worked to get the 10 pages done, but not so good after that. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

I'm not going to make it. Too much on my platter right now. I'll finish mine though...just not by the deadline!

Dena - nooooooo. Sad to hear. Will read it when you are done- might take me a while to get through everyone else's first though - as I've previously said, I'm a really REALLY slow reader - I have to let everything sink in before moving on to the next page.

Pia - After reading your post, I was trying to come up with ideas on something to put up here that wouldn't reveal my whole story, but in the process I seemed to have worked things out and am now at page 51. So in a way - thanks.

Phil - Your trilogy idea also kind of helped me move things along in a way. Got my mind tinkering. So thanks to you too.  

Well, I'm 60 pages in and on course to get it finished within the deadline... Barring any disasters! Good luck to everyone else involved - I'm looking forward to seeing what everyone comes up with.

97 pages in, finally got my mojo back. I think it was the idea of writing a second feature that gave me this boost - but I'm suddenly doubting that I'll have enough time to write it (my second feature).

But a little upset, had to shave about 30 pages from the script and I do think the story actually suffers because of it. Have concluded three of my storylines and finished the first act of my fourth, let's hope I can finish that one in less than 23 pages.

Dena + everybody else who's struggling. Don't give up so easily, guys! I think a little determination can go a long way.

Yesss, finished! The feeling of writing 'Fade Out'. Coming in at 115 pages, Memories of a Forgotten Love is now officially a full feature.

Now, time to jumble everything up and pretend I actually put some effort into it.

How's everybody else doing? Very excited to read the scripts when they're posted!

Woohoo!!  Congratulations!! I bet that feels good!

Mine is a tad short, 85 pages, but the first draft is finished. Maybe some readers can help offer some suggestions for things to add? I sent it out to the same guy that did FK and Blackout. They liked it! How weird is that?  

Hey, congrats on getting it done!

Now I need to get off my rear and get to writing the ending for my script!  

Quoted from Grandma Bear Woohoo!! Mine is a tad short, 85 pages, but the first draft is finished. Maybe some readers can help offer some suggestions for things to add? I sent it out to the same guy that did FK and Blackout. They liked it! How weird is that?

At 85 pages, it shows a job complete. All embellishments can be done afterwards.

As I recently read, someone spent a huge amount of time-- like three years on a first act. A damn good first act, but it was only a first act.

From a real beginning to a real end is difficult thing to master. I speak about that feeling that one would get inside. It's done. (Well maybe not all pretty yet) But the shell so to speak is done.

My goal is to keep mine at around the hundred page mark.

Mostly, at this point, it's about my protagonist needing to save the antagonist who has suffered a terrible fate worse than death.

I'm struggling with a lot of sub-plot and backstory and trying to do a lot of re-arranging. I can feel the thing, but I just can't nail it yet. Why do I like my life simple but my scripts complex? Still, I feel it's been worthwhile even if I can't finish this challenge.

I'm going to try my best. I just don't want to submit something that I know in my heart is undone.

WIP...  

Sandra

Quoted from nawazm11 Yesss, finished! The feeling of writing 'Fade Out'. Coming in at 115 pages, Memories of a Forgotten Love is now officially a full feature. Now, time to jumble everything up and pretend I actually put some effort into it. How's everybody else doing? Very excited to read the scripts when they're posted!

GAHHHHHHHH!!! Curse you, Mo!!!      But, seriously, congrats!  That's awesome!

Unfortunately, besides work really interfering with my writing at the moment (I didn't think about tax season when i committed to this) I can't make my mind focus on writing a "vomit draft" just so I can get to the end. I keep trying to re-write scenes as I go, which makes it a real slog to get through and I worry what it would look like if I just wrote 20 pages in a night without looking back.  After April 15th, I'm going to Vegas for three days, then I'm sending my wife to Atlanta for a week and that's when I'm going to focus on bringing this to completion. Vomit or not.

Quoted from Grandma Bear Mine is a tad short, 85 pages, but the first draft is finished. Maybe some readers can help offer some suggestions for things to add?

How about a lesbian shower scene?  Seems like a good way to increase that script to... say, 115 pages.


Phil

Thanks for the support, guys. Good luck.

Quoted from dogglebe How about a lesbian shower scene?  Seems like a good way to increase that script to... say, 115 pages.

Don't be revealing my screenwriting secrets, Phil. This one takes years to master.

Got to the end... at 81 pages.

Thankfully I have a whole bunch of things swimming in my head. A new scene here, a expanded scene there, a much better ending way over there.

I'm just happy I have the rough version done. Now to finish the real edition

Great to see guys finishing their scripts.

I'm at page 47

But once I finish building a greenhouse, staining the wood, painting the house, fixing the plumbing, putting down a floor, cutting and nailing the molding in my FREE time, outside of own job(electrical).
In time for the in laws to come and torture my soul... then  I will write the rest of my script.

Mark

Quoted from dogglebe bate.

An excerpt from my script.

"Henry follows her gaze -- to see a few TEENAGE HOODLUMS leaning against a car, staring at her. One of them wolfwhistles, the other pretends to masturbate."

I got about twenty more of these, just my sneaky ways to increase the page length.

@Everyone still writing - You can do it, guys!