Ok writer,

Not bad, the writing is actually pretty good. What I would do is go back and try to simplfy things to make it more clearer, if that makes sense. I know, 2 pages doesn't leave you with much wiggle room. Best of Irish luck!

Definitely different from most of the others.  An interesting story and a fun twist at the end.  Enjoyed this one.  Good job.

So Walt is a telepathic robot? Very interesting script, but a couple of questions cropped up. Why is the original Walt being tortured? And why was Walt chosen to be replicated in the first place--what's so special about him?

Well written. I think Walt is a robot but it gets confusing when he goes to view himself in the shed and what exactly they are doing to him/them and why. Feels like there is a great idea here that needs more pages to become coherent.

I like the idea behind this. He thinks he's human but he's an android, maybe linked to his human counterpart. The only reason to keep the human bound and gagged in the shed is for the thriller aspect of it, and that's where this loses me a bit. The twist is effective nevertheless, and you did a good job of showing a glimpse of something bigger that still works in two pages.

I'm about halfway through. This is easily the most well-written I've read. It's really quite good.

The end is a bit confusing. If I had to commit to an interpretation, I'm not sure I could.

Still, even with some confusion, I REALLY like this one.

You should send this script to David Lynch.

Yessss this was awesome. Had some Twilight Zone vibes, and the idea still felt original.

Ngl, the script took me like 3 reads to understand, but after I slowed down a bit I could appreciate how well-written it was. Full of details, "blink and you'll miss it" kind of writing, good stuff.

One of my favorites, awesome stuff~

Writer,

Maybe I just wasn't as engaged with this one enough, but I kind of lost track of what wsa going on here a little. Sorry, but just not for me.

Steve

I had to read this one twice to get it, but admittedly after reading 12 scripts straight, my brain was getting a bit foggy. Good twist on this one. The part that tripped me up was actually the action lines in the POV shot. I think the Bound Man part mixed with my brain fog threw me for a bit. Good job.

Thanks all for taking the time to read and comment.  Bit of swing and a miss on this one as written but I’m encouraged enough to expand on the idea to satisfy some of the grey areas and give it another go.

Alas, I wish I had a plausible motive/intent behind it all but nothing substantial.  The basic idea was main Walt is indeed a robot/cyborg and they’re keep human Walt in the storage shed until the process is complete.  Robot Walt is wired too sensitively and therefore picking up real Walt’s suffering.  I was aiming for a nightmare logic - just the shock of Walt glimpsing ‘himself’ being dragged away in the shed and the reveal that all is not as it seems.  Work needed.

I had a notion that they were using care home patients as subjects for their experiments but that’s about it.  Crazy scientists/unethical science etc. That's all I have for the moment.

See you all in round two for my next poorly conceived idea...

Steve

I really like the premise and you shouldn't let this go to waste. Good stuff.