Nice title page graphic. And a content warning. Hmm.

Widow's peak? Same names and title page style. So this is the same author of that script from the first round. Won't affect my scoring, but these are supposed to be anonymous submissions.

How can Michael watch if both eyes are completely swollen shut?

On its own this is a confusing mid-story snippet. Taking it as a continuation of "Feeling Guilty" it's a fitting conclusion. My only gripe here is that the train station is a fairly minor part of the setting.

Nice (?!) job!

I did NOT write this. But it is very clearly a spin-off of my round one script, right down to the title page graphic(nice!), similar pseudonym, and even the celtx watermark! Impressive.

I'm guessing the author is someone who didn't like the way Feeling Guilty concluded, and wanted Michael to get what he deserved. I'd say you nailed it. Not sure I could have done it better.

Great work.

I'm not buying the suspected author's feint here. But, time will out, yes?

That aside, this was definitely well written.

Quoted from Zack I did NOT write this. But it is very clearly a spin-off of my round one script, right down to the title page graphic(nice!), similar pseudonym, and even the celtx watermark! Impressive. I'm guessing the author is someone who didn't like the way Feeling Guilty concluded, and wanted Michael to get what he deserved. I'd say you nailed it. Not sure I could have done it better. Great work.

Hit him/her with the copyright! You're rich!

Brutal but deserving. Well written and good characterisation. The dialogue was crisp and curt in keeping with the story.
Very well done.

Simple tale well told, but was kinda expecting some sort of twist.

Decent effort

Writer,

Well written, nicely visualized. Not much of a story here at all. Actually, the reader discretion warning should have said the same -- NOT MUCH OF A STORY HERE. Overall, it feels like a scene from a bigger work, and would probably work as such. As a short, not so much.

Steve

Edit: Ah, didn't get that this was a continuation. Now that's pretty cool. shows you how much I'm paying attention.

Straightforward and unapologetic. I liked it. Wanted more but then I saw it's a continuation of that other script. That's cool you kept the story going with different parameters. Looking forward to the finale in the last round.

I lied!

Quoted from Zack I lied!

I just figured you wanted to get another naked dude in one of your scripts.