Excellent visual writing, but the story went over my head. Interested in an explanation from the author.

Good effort.

Great work establishing a weird, surreal environment. I got hooked into it when all kinds of weird objects started floating around the time traveler. The strangeness of it all was refreshing.

The missing digit on the year is a twist, but the future is the future. What does it matter if its 2030 or way beyond that? Why is 2030 good but the surprise date bad? Still, a good sense of dread at the end when the guy is hauled away. High marks for imagination.

This worked for me. Great sense of foreboding, the danger is palpable even if the lures are holographic. I imagine a world where AI and computers have taken over, and I even buy the same technology existing after thousands of years because machines don't really innovate, they improve what already exists. At least that's my take on your world.

I also think the line about winning a star prize is out of character, better to keep it straight. Otherwise I like the writing, and the end twist is effective. Well done.

I really liked this. I wish there was a little more to him avoiding the various lures before he eventually gets caught and maybe his smart watch was a little less a snark watch, but this is a good idea executed quite well. Good job.

Briefly mis-read the title as Lube... that would have been a very different story I guess

So I liked the setup, but if we are to believe that Deion is the first time traveler, implied by the unbelievers line, then he doesn't come across as smart enough.

The idea of the lures is interesting, but what purpose do they serve?

Decently written.

This was interesting. Some of the action is awkward: "Deion becomes aware of objects floating in the water."

I liked the ending. The concept of a human being some kind of trophy in the distant future is intriguing, didn't quite pull it all together though IMO.

Thanks so much for the feedback. As always these comments will shape the final draft!

First thing I'm doing is changing it from a cop car! What was I thinking having a black man get into the back of a police vehicle? Obviously, I wasn't. Too focused on trying to be diverse and failing.

Lure is about a crackpot inventor (aren't they all) who invents a means to travel forward in time, just with no way to get back. To prove his invention to the people like myself who refer to him as a crackpot, he travels a few years into the future.

Unbeknown to him, he's travelled into the mega distant future where humans are extinct and nature has evolved but is just as primal. Creatures can generate holographic images combined with telepathy to create lures to tempt their prey.

Artificial intelligence became sentient but are all dormant. This changes when Deion arrives and his smartwatch attempts to connect to WiFi. An AI rouses and detects the anomaly. It reactivates ancient wireless networks, connects to the Smartwatch and upgrades its software. That's the easy part, the trick then is to recall and relearn how to communicate with a human being.

Its curiosity had been aroused for the first time in millennia. It wants to find out where the human came from, study, experiment and preserve such a rare specimen. To do so, it must guide him away from the creatures and around the lures, while creating a perfect lure of its own.

Lure was my favourite of the bunch, nice work

Cheers, Matthew.

I've uploaded a new version based on all the feedback. Thanks to everyone for the suggestions.