Effective atmosphere. The idea of people disappearing off a boat under strange circumstances is solid. I feel like this could be the opening for a larger project.

It took me awhile to figure out that light = safety. It seems like the captain figured out pretty fast what the rules and circumstances were. He knew somehow that his boy was alone in the dark.

What if there were some kind of strobe? How would that play out?

Well written but I'm not entirely sure why the crashed thing, creates a mist, but the mist doesn't do anything... but when  the light goes off something does happen.

Feels like it needs some more logic to what's happening.

Decent effort though.

Very interesting but this story needs more pages for it to make sense.  Definitely creepy and I was intrigued, but you started it at the inciting incident and there's no set up to let us know why they're there and who they are. You tell us they're documentarians...but how would we know that? And I was lost on what was happening at the end. They disappeared then were decaying under water. Definitely needs more explanation.

Anyway, you set up a really cool atmosphere and part of a story. I hope you expand on it.

Nice effort.