Is there some kind of legend of myth you are playing on here? Is there a story about an ocean god having a pendant stolen from them?

No idea why the guy in the boat has a trident.

Loved the build-up and the intrigue in most of this, writing was great, loved the dialogue but the story needs a lot more context to be thoroughly enjoyed.

Great work though.

This was pretty well written and fairly creative. Basically Aquawoman. Lol.

Not sure the ending is very satisfying here. Still have a bunch of questions.

You met the challenge, even if the high-tech trident feels thrown in. Good effort.

Nice set up, great change in direction midway and a decent ending.
As had been said earlier the trident is definitely shoehorned in to meet the parameters but I think that might have been dealt with earlier had the pendant been the device.
Well done.

Writer,

Decent set up, but you lost me when the tide turned, so to speak. I really couldn't figure out what the pendant was, why the boat captain was after her and the connection or anything here. Good start, confusing finish leads to a bit of a confusing story with not enough explanation.

Steve

I liked this, see it as a thriller(?) so meeting genre requirement.

But the trident doesn't really count as it has no real bearing on the story at all.

Good effort though

Thanks very much for the comments. For anyone curious, she was supposed to be Aquawoman. It was a superhero origin thing shoved into four pages with two pages of exposition that still wasn't enough. I googled aquawoman and the name Anna Curry came up so I named her that. But I know nothing about comic books so maybe she's not well known at all.  

The trident reveal wasn't supposed to go like that. Didn't have room to set it up right and I wanted to go to bed so I had her just find it in a chest lol.

Quoted from eldave1 You know, I think this would make a really great story outside this challenge - the pendant/trident and mermaid stuff all kind of distracted from what was otherwise a tense tale.

I'm thinking of a version where she just stole some incriminating information. No fish talking or trident. Maybe ends with her deciding she can't run anymore and is gonna take the fight to this guy. Still not sure that works for a short but Ill give it a go.