My understanding is that Jennifer committed the murders due to psychosis and the pills let her escape into a fantasy world where everything is right again.  Though I could be wrong...

The flashback structure is straightforward enough to follow just (for me) the overall effect wasn’t all that satisfying.  Maybe it needs a little more to connect us to Jennifer?  I can empathise to a certain extent but I just don’t know enough about her situation and the post partum depression for it to land with the emotional weight that it should.  I want to feel sorry for her but I’m equally repelled by her actions.  Maybe one to come back to but consider dialling back the shock factor of the set-up in favour of a more nuanced approach.

Writer,

I liked this although it's probably something that I can't read again, this kind of stuff really disturbs me. It's well done and I like how you used the medication as a device for time jumping. I am still a bit confused as to the ending, so did this really happen or was it all something in her mind? a kind of imagined scenario if she didn't take her pills? Nice work.

This is grim but effective. The part where she turns to her son with cold eyes. Yikes! The dialogue was short, but realistic. Good work. What would happen if we found out that the woman wasn't taking the prescriptions that her husband had gotten her? What if she spit out a pill shortly before the attack?

All 3 of my entries were written extremely fast...and it shows, especially in this one. I wasn't gonna do this last round, and I probably shouldn't have. LOL

First, the story was supposed to show her intrusive thoughts in the beginning. But the murders didn't happen. Her husband was supportive so they made it through.

There was an infant, to show she had recently had a baby...but I took it out. So stupid. LOL. And I just didn't have the time to show that her husband was aware she was struggling, and he was helping her.

The idea struck me after a convo with my 26 year old daughter who is afraid to have kids because she's scared she'll get PPD. She's always struggled with depression so she's worried. I told her she'd have lots of support and it's the people who are afraid to tell people how they're feeling and the thoughts they're having, who end up taking a bad turn.

Anyway, thanks for the reviews.

And one for the girls. Yay!

You're right with your advice too. Knowing what your daughter's fears are you'd be vigilant and you'd both hopefully be on top of it.

V.nice job, Marnie.