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Sandra Elstree.
Posted: October 31st, 2008, 1:39am Report to Moderator
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Quoted from Sandra Elstree.

I mostly really (mostly really?) well, almost completely and thoroughly enjoyed this except for a few things.

The writer shows too much talent to leave too obvious typos unattended even if it's an OWC. Not capitalizing the first letter at the beginning of a sentence and glaring typos bother me when I know the person writing it is better than that.

Other than that I really enjoyed the dialogue between the boys and I think the pacing worked well.

Two things that I would adjust:

1. No hurting of little chihuahuas is this script because I think it distorts the fun mood you've got going.

2. End with your last bit of dialogue of "I say we get the heck out of town."

Good job on this one. Easily my favorite so far.

And P.S. ... I love the word "things" in the title. Just give that bit of a jab to all the old English that ever existed in your life who said you should search for better nouns to describe things.

Sandra


Ste is right. I didn't miss it either. But I guess I was favoring this script and the typos had disappeared into oblivion in my mind- goes to show you that if you like something- you can be very forgiving. Now who's the multitasker?!

I agree with Ste though on this one- even though I'm bent in favor of this script, I think I have to lean in his direction.

If it came down to it, I'd chose the script that paid attention to detail- even in an OWC. Sorry TFTG. But it doesn't mean I still don't favor you.

Sandra




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as a person that struggles with speling and Grammer...i guess i tend to be a little more forgiving when it comes to those types of errors...so many of the submissions are "overwritten" and tend to read like novels, rather than "specs" i guess it was refreshing to be able to read one through without having to re-read scenes to follow the author's storyline...

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Hey Jordan, nice to see you take a chance on a true zombie script. Because I know there was a page limit, I'm not gonna bark at you on how fast the zombies were able to come about after the meteor hit. But there were also a lot of spelling errors. Did you even read over this, boy?? I'm gonna smack you real good. Nah, just kidding. 1958...Did they even have headphones back then for radio stations? I don't even know what a radio station looked like on the inside during the 50s. But the way people talked didn't really seem 50-ish to me, which kind of brought me back to the modern day feeling. But it was cute...except for the corpses eating people and ripping Chihuahuas in half and stuff, but other that that, it was cute. ha ha.

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