Since I have never watched any of the films in this series I probably missed all the jokes. So, just reading it as any other short, it didn't really do much for me. My fault, I guess.

This is the second script where there was directions either to a YT video or wiki page or something like that. I'm not going to stop in the middle of a script and google something! I hope this isn't a trend...

Everyone else seem to enjoy your script, so just ignore this post.

Cheers!  

A newbie writer.

A lot action/description that could be condensed to 1 or 2 lines

A little lazy on not naming your characters

Quite a lot of typos  

Besides all that:

I really enjoyed this one.  Laughed out loud

          MICHAEL
          Too old for this shit.  

It's good to see Michael finally have a voice

A very clever concept.

I actually played with the idea of the OWC being the curse if I managed to get an entry...
Which I didn't

Great job on entering

Thanks for all the feedback on Freeing Michael. I struggled to come up with an idea for this one, and when I struggle for an idea, I tend to go comedy.

Comedy tends to unleash creativity and, therefore, fun. The flip side is fun and creativity can lead to errors and/or problems, as many of you accurately pointed out.

In my new draft of Freeing Michael, I cleaned up some of the errors, improved scene flow, broadened the ending and honed Michael's lines. Can read on my website and listen to that iconic soundtrack.  

https://robert-timsah.com/

Directly to new draft
https://drive.google.com/file/d/14MuYzAKrsVXqkXW6jM3tA13bwwM7OJ5Q/view?usp=sharing