My notes: A Man tells a Woman (Not named) that he knows that she killed his son in a hit and run accident. He punishes her (a vegan)  by making her eat a cute kitten with puppies for the main course. All done with dialogue and hitting her.

Some suspense of belief the woman wouldn't vomit while eating the cat - RAW!

The Man was quite the talker to get all the exposition out. Might have been nice to see if the Woman had a brain. Drama is a conflict between people. Give and take. You need some meaningful resistance,

Actually, I liked it. Made me feel something. And you succeeded with the Ew! part.

Quoted from grademan My notes: A Man tells a Woman (Not named) that he knows that she killed his son in a hit and run accident. He punishes her (a vegan)  by making her eat a cute kitten with puppies for the main course. All done with dialogue and hitting her. Some suspense of belief the woman wouldn't vomit while eating the cat - RAW! The Man was quite the talker to get all the exposition out. Might have been nice to see if the Woman had a brain. Drama is a conflict between people. Give and take. You need some meaningful resistance, Actually, I liked it. Made me feel something. And you succeeded with the Ew! part.

Loved how Gary plussed it all. Even the "Ew"!  

Sandra

So we have this script 'written by a meat eater', and another script 'written by a vegetarian'. If the author of this script is who I think it is then it's interesting to see that they have trashed each others scripts. Some real life drama and conflict between a carnivore and vegetarian is brought to the OWC! Maybe the differences are just too much...

Anyway I thought this one was pretty good. Had an actual story going on which has been rare for this OWC, and some thought has been put into this. I do think some of the dialogue from the woman could be improved, as it seems a tad too thought out and logical given the terrifying predicament she is in.

Overall good job though, and this has a solid ending which has been lacking in most others. Ends on a high point and fits the story, so that was a refreshing change too.

Cheers,
Tim.

I liked this script. Got chills when the woman ate the kitten, raw.

There's a lot of tension and conflict in here. Kept me interested throughout. You threw in a good explanation as to why the man is doing all this.

Although it's dialogue heavy, the last act saved it.

I don't want to know what's for dessert.

Very good!

Had me right up to the part about the kitten.  The cat lover in me hated its fate.

Most compelling OWC story so far.