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grass + visions = weed?

a bit of Perrault's tales + Lewis Carroll + zombies + "Nothing"... You shake... and...

Strong story. Sorry, but where is the secret?

Michel

Clever. Strange. The geeks were one way to go. You've got imagination. Enough
said.

Gary

This was really, really good.  Well written with terrific visuals, dialogue, the whole nine yards!  The Red Riding Hood bit was funny!

Thanks for all the feedback - much appreciated!

I approached the OWC as a writing exercise with a deadline (it’s amazing how motivating a deadline is!) and wanted to experiment with an abstract style (a big nod to Lewis Carroll) to explore the theme of the relativity of reality, of the “Does a fish know it’s in water?” variety.

The picnicking family was a creation of the two Geeks. And while the Geeks thought they were masters of their universe, they too were products of someone/something else’s creation/imagination – that’s the probable conclusion I was trying to lead the audience to with the very final image. The ending was meant to have a level of ambiguity.

Were the Geeks real or not? In my view, they’re not. That’s why no one had personal names.

So, what was/is real? Depends on your view. Everyone’s reality is different.

I realised from the outset that this type of execution isn’t everyone’s cup of tea, so I got in early and poked fun at my writing - one of the Geeks: “We gotta give ’em more depth and develop some sort of story narrative.”

The secret exposed? Son: “We don’t exist. That’s the big secret. We’re not real…”

It was rewarding to see the range of responses – all of them instructive.

I had fun writing this, and I hope you had a bit of fun reading it. Thanks again!

recent revelation, super jailish in the pullback