This was a sweet story, but could have been much better.

I liked the start more than the end.

You had some great dialogue throughout, it worked well.

The whole thing with the Dad was good, and I liked the relationships between the characters.

I think the ending could have been better... and action was simple and effective.

Well done.

As many had already said, the story is pretty good. I would suggest you play up the premature burial story because that is much more interesting than what you have right now.

I see there is some hint of romance but not fully sketched out. Maybe you need to trim the psychologist scene and add a bit more romance into the story.

Writing is well done.

I enjoyed this script. Good job.