So this script of the day was a OWC?

Pretty good.  

I like the descriptions you wrote. They were a little flowery, but not overly flowery and I could see everything nicely.

I think you should write this one into a feature.

That way you can really get into who is who and why they are doing what they do.
You could also create a nice twist at the end.

I'm not sure if I like the cop being in on it or not. It's kind of easy, but then again, maybe the cop and everyone else could be part of a cult of some kind. Not sure though, it ended too soon to actually find out what was really going on.

Nice job though with what you have here, but I'd like to see more.  

Cindy

Thanks a ton...this short is being filmed by three different people right now. Once I get a complete version of the short film...I will post

Quoted from Pale Yellow Thanks a ton...this short is being filmed by three different people right now. Once I get a complete version of the short film...I will post

Three!!!

Thats brilliant, well done.

I've only seen locations on one....so I'll believe it when I see it. People always talk...but when I see some results....then I'll believe ....lotta wanna be filmmakers out there. If/when I get something, I'll post it though...