Man. Your first sentence..."Filled to capacity up with hundreds of guests." This doesn't make sense. Not a good first impression.

Next paragraph, not even half way down the page, "His beams a disapproving gaze" - this is wrong.

What's with all the caps? This is something you made up. PHIL FROM MARKETING??? This is NOT a scene heading.

You want people to take their time to read your work? Then YOU should take the time to format properly and proofread.

This had some interesting dialogue with a Beetlejuice vibe.

There is some formatting issues with this and one that stuck out is your misuse of caps.  Anytime you caps a word, it is meant to draw the readers attention to the page, introducing a character, or an auditory word.  I've seen a technique where writers will caps verbs to intensify a scene, although when they are overdone or mishandled, it will slow down a read.

I chuckled when Phil from marketing was introduced and the ending made me think.  But the horror and modern witches were absent.

Johnny

Long dialog blocks, but I chuckled here and there. Spelling errors, such as on the first page, "his (he) beams". Page 3, "crowd od (of) demon", and more.

Hmmm. Now that I'm finished, not sure how I feel about the beginning. It almost seemed comedic, so tying in a mass murderer almost felt off for me, but at the same time I got what the author was going for. I think a good effort overall, though no real horror per se.

Weighted Matrix: https://docs.google.com/spread.....TTUE&usp=sharing

Producer's Notes: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NNGaVlrrpkjIfp-BRGjpTE03W1e5lZuRceJ3wQECYaI/edit?usp=sharing

4. And He Spoke A Darkened Heart by Four - Horror - A mix of corporate philosophy and evil combine to make merriment on the eve of war.
Brief - Warlock and Co. annual shareholder's meeting provides a backdrop to Hitler's pact.

Location(s)  - Ballroom, corporate balcony
Cast - 3 + crowd, all in business dress
Protagonist(s)  -  
GESTALT, 100, pleasant old white collar businessman, CEO
PHIL, 30s, marketing department head
YOUNG MAN, 20, young Adolf Hitler
Genre & Marketability - Fantasy Horror. Sorta marketable. It jumps midway from one scenario to another without a fluid transfer.
Comments  -  Turn off your screenwriting program's mores and continued's feature. FYI, Satanists are more aligned with monotheistic Christianity than polytheistic pagan witchcraft. What is going on with your screenwriting program cutting off the bottoms of ascenders? You're not adjusting the line spacing, are you? (Cheater.) Calm down on the all-caps. Promising first page. Characters are introduced in all-caps, age, briefest description, then on with the sentence. Yeah, just quit with the all caps. You're bugging me with this by the top half of pg 2. Srsly - quit it. Nice story. Don't do "THE END." Learn some proper formatting and you'll be alright. This'll be pretty expensive to produce as a live action short; animation, maybe. Big ballrooms and huge audiences all in full dress  are exactly how you begin to understand the difference between writing pie-in-the-sky stories and stories that are budget minded = likely to be produced.
Script format - Needs work.
Final word - Nice, two stories abbutted, too costly to produce.

$10,000 - 20,000      Lo/Hi Estimated Budget Range
/ 6.5               Screenplay Pages
= $1,538 -  3,076     Estimated Cost Per Screen Minute

Adherence to Given Criteria:
Modern Witches and/or Warlocks - No, it's classic Judeo-Christian demonized witches
Horror - Eh... not really. Entertaining comedy drama, no legit horror. Reluctant fail.