Boy this Adam guy really likes his work... I respect that. I love my work. There was a saying one time -- "I love myself cos' no one else will"  

Something like that...

Anyways, I'm checking this out on principal. I won't pull punches if it sucks, will give credit if it's good and if it's average I'll give you my opinion on how it can be better.

Good luck. I'll review this by tonight.

Review and thoughts below:
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1st -  Your intro is 6 min long. By 6 min the initial plot is laid out in spades in any one of my scripts. You have one of the longest VO I've ever read. It just goes on and on and on.  To be honest, I started to skim it to get to the meat of the story.  Which was on page 7. So, Maybe you should take those pages out and start your movie on page 7.  Just my thoughts.  

Try to make the legacy and legend behind the land and the triforce unfold gradually. Through dialogue and intrigue. Not forcing it down our throats all at the start and then why we try to decipher it, try to decipher the next chain of events. Know what I mean?  It's sloppy and careless. It's lazy writing is what it is.  It's you writing a box cutter opening so you don't have to think out more plot points later on or as the movie unfolds.

2nd - Even though this isn't "really" formated right or in PDF I can still tell you ran way long on your action slugs. These are like 6 and 7 lines a pop. You should never go over 4 and certainly not 5. EVER! I try to do 3 most of the time. You will find 4 in my work, but I try to keep it down a bit.

3rd - I gave you 10 pages of 60 to entertain me or hold my interest and you failed to do so.  You didn't write a screenplay here... Well,  you did but at the same time you tried writing a book. You're being an author too much in the 1st 10 pages and not enough of a screenwriter. You're describing too much in too much detail. Be blunt... Be sharp. Get your point across in as little as possible. You didn't do that here.

I'd go on and on... but your story is boring. It's Zelda and Zelda, to me, is legendary cos I grew up with the series. If I still played games I've probably play 1 to 3 again and again. This isn't me not loving the franchise... It's me not liking what you've wrote cos what you've written is boring. Nothing happens.  

Not just in 10 pages but 20 pages... Nothing happens. It's just blah and blah... It's like one long joke that ends up not having a punch line.

All we learn in 20 pages is that you've obviously studied up on the characters. We got 40 pages for something to happen and I have a feeling, even if I finish it, nothing will happen... Why not take all the love you have for these characters and write a different script... Not this one. This one blows. Write another one.

LEt me be clear, tho... You write very well. You do. But you don't know how to pace a story. Well, not by this standard here anyways.

Sorry....