Coincidence by Gerasimos Rozis - Drama, Sports - Two girls seek out glory spanning across several parallel realities, but with their destinies intertwined who will succeed? 100 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hi do you have a longer synopsis of the film we can read 1 to 2 pages?

Thanks

Quoted from Y5Films Hi do you have a longer synopsis of the film we can read 1 to 2 pages? Thanks

Probably best to contact the writer directly, since not all writers show up here on the forums. His contact info is on the cover page, just click on this Coincidence

Dear Gerasimos,
P4 sock and awe not sure if a pun or a typo!!
"Reality is whatever a scientific theory says it is."  ooh you cynic. Good job I didn't invest in string theory!! (now debunked)
Typo P29 that’s a chat breaker.
P41 would the shrink Helen really say this to a client? I wonder if P45 needs trimming so you dont go to full on Richard Feynman !
HELEN  And what makes a screenplay great?
NUMBER TWELVE A compelling story, powerful characters, desire, a character’s
journey, the climax, crisis, tragedy..
The very same is true of life well lived. . . .
P64 The X-ray machine shuts down - they are silent, its the MRI scans that are deafening.
Can one even say androcentrism in this day and age?? OK it's 2017 !! So true . . .

You write the action sequences beautifully. IMHO some of the speech sections are a tad long - if you broken them into sections it would read easier.
I guess the reality headings would have to be on screen - so as to set them as differing realities.
Sourcecode meet Deja vu in a positive ouotcome. well done - best JtF