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Apologies up front. This might not be my cup of tea so comments re story are definitely subjective. Shot well, cast well, acted well...
I had a lot of trouble hearing the male character's dialogue, while hers was clear as a bell. Audio, I imagine, is not easy when one character speaks in a breathy, low, stuttering tone, but I got it all the second time around with headphones in.
This line: There's nothing more dangerous than a man ready to die. Yes, it's a great line but it didn't seem like he was (ready to die) or have I completely missed something? More like absolute revenge on others.
Did he just hack her ear off? Okay, he did. And the acting during and shortly after is great, but then she seems to get over the pain a bit too fast.
This seems verging on torture porn, jmho, women as victims unable to fight back, women as instigators of cruelty towards certain men and deserving of comeuppance? The actual gore is minimal but what's the big takeaway message of this?
Is it ultimately a message about bullying and the notion of superficiality? I can get with that - the culture of and obsession with beauty at the expense of those less genetically blessed - Instagram, Facebook, presenting perfect lives etc. And nice commentary re her leaving specifics of her digital footprint - he knows where she lives, and now where her boyfriend lives. Oblivious, dumb female, right?
I felt like I was missing a lot of your intention with the actual script though until the Super spelled it out further at the end re Incel. Second listen headphones in also cleared up a lot.
The opening tone - Larry's voice-over was verging on melodramatic imh. I'd personally put more of an objective, dispassionate news-voice to that dialogue.
Am I supposed to regard him as the ultimate victim and she as perpetrator?
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