Is the fact the girl is beautiful relevant? or does she have a more relevant trait you can use instead (Plus beautiful is a bit mundane, countless scripts use this word to describe female characters)
Again with the gangster, 'local' feels a bit weak - any other traits that would be a bit more evocative? (Ruthless, for example)
Something seems strange about "gets the money to save her" - sounds like you are telling us she has achieved her goal in the logline.
How about something a bit more like "... an impoverished girl strikes a deal with a ruthless gangster in order to save her"