As I was posting this, I was reminded of one of my favorite scenes from one of my favorite movies, Ed Wood.  Ed is interviewing with Mr. Weiss to direct his movie, I Changed My Sex.  Ed asks, "Is there a script?" and Mr. Weiss replies, "F*ck no, but there's a poster!"

I've got a complete basic outline concept, with a beginning, a middle and an end, and now I've got a logline I'd like your thoughts on, but I have no title.  So The scene would be:

"Is there a title?"
"F*ck no, but there's a logline!"

Anyway, here it is: When a committed bachelor finds a crazed woman in his living room claiming to be his wife, he’s forced to face the ghosts of what might have been to help her get back where she belongs.

A little hard to get at not knowing the story or the genre.  But I'll take a stab.

Living room too specific - just go with home or even more general than that

Not sure you need crazed - it implies she is nuts - but is she?? Or has she just been placed in a different reality? I would go with something like mysterious

When a committed bachelor encounters a mysterious woman claiming to be his wife, he’s forced to face the ghosts of what might have been to help her get back where she belongs.

Quoted from eldave1 A little hard to get at not knowing the story or the genre.  But I'll take a stab. Living room too specific - just go with home or even more general than that Not sure you need crazed - it implies she is nuts - but is she?? Or has she just been placed in a different reality? I would go with something like mysterious When a committed bachelor encounters a mysterious woman claiming to be his wife, he’s forced to face the ghosts of what might have been to help her get back where she belongs.

It is a tough task without knowing details.  It is a science fiction story and you are correct about her being from a different reality.  The living room, indeed his apartment, are VERY central to the whole story, so I felt it was good to foreshadow, however, I left it out in take two.

Here is my next attempt.  More words, but I feel it is strong.

The sudden appearance of a bewildered woman claiming to be his wife turns the world of a confirmed bachelor upside down, forcing him to face an uncertain future and his own life choices as he attempts to help her get back to where she belongs.

Quoted from steven8 It is a tough task without knowing details.  It is a science fiction story and you are correct about her being from a different reality.  The living room, indeed his apartment, are VERY central to the whole story, so I felt it was good to foreshadow, however, I left it out in take two. Here is my next attempt.  More words, but I feel it is strong. The sudden appearance of a bewildered woman claiming to be his wife turns the world of a confirmed bachelor upside down, forcing him to face an uncertain future and his own life choices as he attempts to help her get back to where she belongs.

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Awesome.  Thanks!!