I was down with this. The subject matter interests me and I was enjoying the read. The end left me a little underwhelmed because I was expecting an alternate universe riff rather than a repeated one. Like I thought maybe the gold record would come back, but have different music. An alternate Beethoven's 9th would be a neat thing to have fall from the sky. To me the intriguing thing about the multiverse is the little differences between them. As was mentioned, Another Earth does a good job in grounding those possibilities in something emotional. There’s a hint of that with the Grandfather, but I could’ve used something stronger.

Love the space theme, and Nicky is very appealing.
Interesting material. This story would make a terrific feature. Most likely the limited number of pages prohibits being able to fully flesh out subplots.
So many visual aspects will keep anyone's attention.

No description or age for George?

Page 1, the dialog is very stiff, and rushed. It needs to flow naturally.

Well, I liked the story. But IMO the dialog throughout needs to be more natural. And Nicky was cardboard. Give her some life, some personality.

Good structure though. With some work this could be really good.

Not my cup of tea. Some of the writing was clunky and I wasn't entirely sure what was going on. I have virtually no knowledge of space or anything close to what this script was about and as a result couldn't enjoy anything about it. Not sure what the UL is either. Doppelgangers?

Judging by the logline, this is gonna be a painful read. Not because it's bad, but because it confused the fuck out of me.

I liked the setup with granddad and the girl but I got lost pretty quickly after that. I read to the end but didn't understand much of it.  Sci-Fi is one of the few genres I cannot read/watch so I'm not saying it's bad, but it's not for me

Very low budget

I had a tough time following this one, maybe it's my lack of fondness for Sci-Fi but I did try

Not sure if this is an Urban Legend.
Sorry I couldn't be more helpful.

Awkward writing from the get-go but I like the enthusiasm – some peeps are going to hate this but it’s a lot better than some of the beginnings in this OWC.

“Farther than any music?” What the hell is he talking about?

“The walls (of the hobby room) are full of astronomy photos” We know this information from the slug-  just a little way to tighten your action.

“From the central dish antenna several metallic installations stick far out into dark space.” This is the picture, right? You’re losing me a bit at the moment.

“You know, when I was your age, I used to think about a solar system such as ours, and that there might be another I waving back at me.” He’s allowed to think that now as well if he wants – has he given up all hope of everything he believed in?

“He smiles as he caught Nicky wave goodnight to the night sky.” A bit clumsy – “as Nicky waves to the night sky” would read better.

“a wormhole would let us reach further away places.” Somebody has just watched Interstellar.

“tips her pen onto a notepad.” So she was using a pc tablet before and now in the future – it’s a pen and notepad?
Has the human race declined technology wise? Maybe this is a trait of Nicky’s but that is the case, then she would be using a pen and notepad when younger.

Oh please! The golden record just happened to land beside Nicky – I’m not buying into this, and to be honest – this is another one that’s gone straight over my head.

Liked the Brady Bunch moment at the end but this story as a whole – I didn’t follow it, or understand it. I like Sci-fi but not the preachy, nothing happens type and that’s what this felt like.  Sorry but this one missed the mark for me.

Well written.
Middle school level understanding of basic science, however the story is quite pleasing in its gentle nature - a welcome relief from the counter-dearth of steady horror submissions.
A fave film of mine for its similar construct and execution is ‘Contact’, which this felt a lot like as I read it.
‘Upside Down’ is another similar film except the audience should just embrace a departure from known physics and just roll with the given universe. It also has this “kind” approach, so you’re obviously in good company.

Not sure if this is an urban legend -- and it reads like a shooting script -- but I liked it.

However, Kyle's dialogue is just one huge block of text. And for some reason, I can't copy and paste it properly.

Code       KYLE So, here we can see how the theory of parallel universes or nowadays called the multiverse gave a completely new insight about room. Unfortunately, we're once again getting smaller as we already thought we are. Maybe we would have to find a passageway such as the recent science fiction interpretation of wormholes. A spaceship going through a passageway could reach places far beyond our imagination. The problem of reaching light speed would be gone.

???

But at the end of the day, it's a OWC and it's about the story above all else. I got an Another Earth/Interstellar "tesseract" vibe with the parallel universes. With a little more tightening up, this could go from a good script to a great one.

A- and consider.

Writing style:
Some errors here and there but I was able to imagine the scenes just fine.

Dialogue:
It was alright in most parts. Some lines were a bit on the nose. Like:

Code We send the Voyager to reach them. So did they -- They send the Voyager to reach us.

Characters:
They were a bit flat. I didn't get to see them act or react in a unique or interesting way.

Story:
It was a scientific peace of fiction, but there was no drama or emotion to it. It was just about the possibility of counter-earths. No more no less. The story has to engage us both intellectually and emotionally. This is why in "Interstellar" the father daughter relation was crucial. It saved the movie from being soulless.

Overall:
You got potentials. Try to work harder to make your story compelling. Make us care for the characters on a human level. We can't care for myths and science. We can only care for lively beings.

Good luck.