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Quoted Text EXT. UNIVERSITY OF WISCONSIN AT MADISON - NIGHT
Establishing.
The night before graduation. |
In the header you don't need at Madison You don't need Establishing... Instead use that line to describe what we are looking at. Night before graduation should really be a SUPER
Quoted Text INT. DORM LOBBY - NIGHT
The sound of a woman sobbing radiates.
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Go - Noun - Verb - Object e.g., A WOMAN'S SOB echoes in the room GRACE DALTON (22) looks around.
Quoted Text She has long, dark hair, soul piercing eyes and an impossibly posh British accent.
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Soul pirecing eyes is a bit tropey. What is she looking around at ? Does her hair color matter? Push yourself here - give us a description that really gives us some insight into your character. I like your dialogue. |