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guyjackson |
Posted: March 28th, 2006, 7:12pm |
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I have read a few scripts that have contained love/sex scenes in the past, and it seems that the writer just places "They begin to make love" as a default phrase for sex scenes.
However, I have a scene in a script where the sex scene will be intercut with another scene, so would it be correct to literally spell out the sex scene? Nothing porn-related or anything, but some type of description, like the removal of clothing and the finish? Or should I just say "Actor A and Actress A are still making love."? |
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Martin |
Posted: March 28th, 2006, 7:28pm |
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Been Around
LocationFrankfurt, Germany Posts607 Posts Per Day 0.09 |
I think you can afford to be descriptive as long as you don't go overboard. It depends how important the love scene is and if there are any specifics you can add that will enhance character and story. I always hate reading "they make love" because it's such a bland way to write it and it tells us virtually nothing. I'm not saying I want blow by blow action, but I think you need to describe it just a little. Are they tearing off each other's clothes in fit of passion or is it something slower and more sensual?
It's a tough subject to write so tread carefully. Shameless plug: I have a sex scene in my script Open Your Mind which is described in some detail because I wanted to build some suspense. Nobody's complained about it so far.
If you look at American Beauty where his wife cheats on him, they have wild, noisy sex which shows the wife's built-up frustrations in her marriage. You might want to see how that's written. |
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Herodreamer79 |
Posted: March 28th, 2006, 7:29pm |
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i just read scripts from actual movies that contain love/sex scenes... and pick and choose what i think is appropriate for the script i am writing.
i usually leave it pretty vague... unless im writing the screen play for a porno..... JUST KIDDING |
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George Willson |
Posted: March 28th, 2006, 7:30pm |
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Of The Ancients Doctor who? Yes, quite right.
LocationBroken Arrow Posts3591 Posts Per Day 0.51 |
It all depends on how specific you want it to be. You can switch back and forth or you can write:
INT. BEDROOM
Bob and Linda make love.
INTERCUT WITH:
EXT. CITY STREET
Linda's husband is attacked and killed by hoodlums.
END INTERCUT
This will show that at the director's discretion, the two scenes would go back and forth without actually writing out every single action. |
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Martin |
Posted: March 28th, 2006, 7:33pm |
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Been Around
LocationFrankfurt, Germany Posts607 Posts Per Day 0.09 |
Just checked that scene in American Beauty.
"Carolyn and Leonard are in the middle of sex. Dramatic, pyrotechnic, vocal sex.
CAROLYN Yes! Oh, God, yes!
LEONARD You like getting nailed by the king?
CAROLYN Yes! I love it! Oh, yes! Fuck me, your majesty!"
I think that says it all. |
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Herodreamer79 |
Posted: March 28th, 2006, 7:34pm |
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Just checked that scene in American Beauty.
"Carolyn and Leonard are in the middle of sex. Dramatic, pyrotechnic, vocal sex.
CAROLYN Yes! Oh, God, yes!
LEONARD You like getting nailed by the king?
CAROLYN Yes! I love it! Oh, yes! Fuck me, your majesty!"
I think that says it all. |
HAHA you ever seen Bad Santa??? "girl you aint gonna sh!t right for a week!!" |
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dogglebe |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 10:01am |
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Read 'The Cabin' if you want to know how NOT to write a sex scene.
Virgins shouldn't write erotica!
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Antemasque |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 10:56am |
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LocationBaltimore, MD Posts558 Posts Per Day 0.08 |
Hmmm. Shouldn't be too descriptive in sex scenes.... maybe i should cut some things down in the script i'm writing. |
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Helio |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 12:06pm |
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Old Timer Better to die with vodka than with tedium!
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At the page 84 of my Oporto’s Bride, I wrote that the two lovers Carlos and Maria de Jesus are making love.
I didn’t mentioned any word about sex in this scene because the characters stop for a while to plot against the main character Lucia, but at the scene end when Maria de Jesus orders Carlos to come to her I wrote:
“Carlos lifts his arms up, rearing, neighing and whinnying like a horse. Maria de Jesus pulls Carlos towards herself and the continue making sex.”
For me it was enough to show what type of sex they are doing. I think I did it well. |
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George Willson |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 12:25pm |
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Of The Ancients Doctor who? Yes, quite right.
LocationBroken Arrow Posts3591 Posts Per Day 0.51 |
.. maybe i should cut some things down in the script i'm writing. |
Yeah, I've already mentioned that to you.
Maria de Jesus pulls Carlos towards herself and the continue making sex. |
If it's worded that way in the script, boy did I miss something. Helio, you either make love or have sex. You can't make sex. You can make babies, though. |
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Helio |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 12:32pm |
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Old Timer Better to die with vodka than with tedium!
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Very funny Willson!!! hehe- I meant " I think I wrote it well" |
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Antemasque |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 12:33pm |
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Been Around the ocean floor is hidden from your viewing lens
LocationBaltimore, MD Posts558 Posts Per Day 0.08 |
Yeah, I've already mentioned that to you.
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I know you have. But i was at first like ehh? should i do it? then after a re-reading of it i was like. holy shit i'm not writing a porno. haha. So i cut it down a lot. and hmmm. Maybe i should do a 'writers cut' ya know instead of a directors cut. haha. |
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George Willson |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 12:45pm |
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Of The Ancients Doctor who? Yes, quite right.
LocationBroken Arrow Posts3591 Posts Per Day 0.51 |
Maybe i should do a 'writers cut' ya know instead of a directors cut. haha. |
Well, since there's no director at this point, I woudl think that's the only option you have for now. |
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Old Time Wesley |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 1:12pm |
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LocationOntario, Canada Posts2908 Posts Per Day 0.38 |
Quoted Text “Carlos lifts his arms up, rearing, neighing and whinnying like a horse. Maria de Jesus pulls Carlos towards herself and the continue making sex.” |
I guess Maria wasn't walking straight after that session. If you follow what film tells you to do you'd either use the generic thrust, thrust, finish or just show the end when they get off of each other. |
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Mr.Z |
Posted: March 29th, 2006, 1:40pm |
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Been Around
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