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Friday, September 29, 2006
A FEW PIECES ON DIALOGUE
Leaving our discussion of character for a while, to be returned
to soon. Thought I'd do a little piece, or a few pieces on
dialogue ? since one of the Million-Dollar Screenwriting gang
just requested same by email...
...so...dialogue.
First, let's dispense w/the idea that it should be
"Natural" ...or "conversational".
It should SEEM natural and conversational. But it probably
ISN'T that way, if it's any good. Would you send out the
rough draft of screenplay or let anyone else read it?
You shouldn't.
And ALL day-to-day, real life conversation is a ROUGH DRAFT. We
don't have the opportunity to edit what we say off the cuff in
conversation. Ever heard of "l'esprit de l'escalier"?
It's a French expression that translates as "the spirit of
the staircase", that thought that occurs to you after the
argument inside, when you're leaving, on the staircase, an
idea comes to you, where you think "THAT'S what I SHOULD
have said!"
Well, that's a REWRITE, my friend.
A dialogue polish in real life. And THAT'S the line that goes
in the screenplay. Our characters are a little better than we
are, they speak a little better, get to the point quicker,
distill it more eloquently than we do. We can have a three-hour
pointless conversation, but we shouldn't film it.
So, it sounds like real conversation, but it's really
conversation DISTILLED. Just as drama is life w/the boring
parts removed, so dialogue is talk with the bad lines removed
and the good lines heightened, ok? Trust me, no one's going
to say "This dialogue's just too good, I don't believe
it." They're going to say "This is great." You should
have such problems.
Ok then.
Let's begin a dialogue about?dialogue.
What's it got to do? What is dialogue for? I'd say it has
two purposes:
A. To advance story
B. To reveal character
And by the way, great when you can do both at once. One of my
last passes for a dialogue polish is always to say "Well, this
line is already advancing story, how can it also reveal
character?" Or vice-versa, but personally my problem is
usually the former.
And let me share with you, at this juncture, my first rule of
writing dialogue, or the first pointer I give my students:
"Don't."
That is, when you can avoid it, when you've got a way to SHOW
rather than tell, do that, do that, DO THAT.
Remember, dialogue is the icing on the cake. Make sure that you
have a cake first, which, in this analogy, is a great story with
great characters. And then, apply icing ? it would serve at
this point to say that they DID make great movies WITHOUT any
dialogue back in the silent era, but they never made any without
good stories or good characters, did they? So, you don't need
dialogue to be great, do you?
That said, we don't make silent movies anymore...so you're
probably going to have to the characters say something,
sometime. But remember, you can tell an entire story without it
and it CAN be almost all character...if you see Reservoir Dogs
for instance, Quentin Tarantino goes wild with the pop culture
references and the story is mainly carried in the actions of the
characters ?-
-- when Mr. Blonde is preparing to torture the hostage police
officer, he doesn't SAY: "I'm going to torture you.
First I'll douse you gasoline, which will scare you, but
what's even worse is, I'm going to cut off your ear."
No.
He turns up the radio and he talks about what's playing
on the radio and dances around the warehouse with a jerry can of
gasoline and a straight-razor. And it's all the scarier
thereby. If you watch the DVD, QT's commentary talks a lot
about how the characters don't talk about the story.
Another great study in dialogue to me, is David Mamet's HEIST.
You virtually can't discern the story if you're only
listening to the dialogue. It's a caper film ? there's a
whole plan, but it's virtually never mentioned...then it goes
off and various factions fight each other for the loot, but that
too, is never said.
So, in those two, the dialogue is virtually ALL character.
But, a word of caution. Heist, directed by David Mamet from his
own script, almost certainly set up with financing and all
beforehand, perhaps with Gene Hackman attached. Reservoir Dogs,
self-financed by QT till the eleventh hour when his agents got
him more cash, Harvey Keitel and bunch of other goodies.
Neither one was set up as a spec script. They didn't come in
from unknown writers and get the quick "once-over" from some
agent's assistant who ONLY READS the dialogue (if that).
So, I might urge you to have your characters talk a little bit
more about the story as it goes on ? or at least not to bury
the most important story details in narration, where they risk
being missed. You'll want to strike a balance where, yes, we
can get the gist of the story from the dialogue alone ? and
the story's a powerhouse when we read every word ? which
we'll do, because the dialogue will make us WANT to do.
So...dialogue so far:
Distill and intensify it. Show, don't tell when possible.
Balance it between story and character.
More coming...
Thanks "A Million",
Chris Soth
http://www.getresponse.com/t/3008291/556840/156856012/http://www.MillionDollarScreenwriting.com/bloghttp://www.getresponse.com/t/3008292/556840/156856012/Chris Soth