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yosemitesam
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 12:11pm
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I am working on a scene where a central character is on a phone and I want to write the scene so you don't hear the person on the other end. Only the responses by the central character. I bet there is more than one way to do this. The way I have been doing it feels wrong to me. How do you folks write this? Thanks from Yosemite NP!
ajr
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 12:18pm
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I do it with ellipses (...) whenever the character is pretending to hear the other person speak.
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dogglebe
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 12:59pm
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JOHN I didn't say that... That's not what I said.... What did I say...? I said two large pies with onions and meatball... No, you sent me one large onion and one large meatball.
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Blakkwolfe
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 1:49pm
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PETE Yessa', you did-a!...Yeah-huh!... You sai' One-a Largia onio' an' on' largia Mea'baw! Atsa wha' chu' ask me fo...at'sa wha' chu get!
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Mr. Blonde
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 1:49pm
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All three = the way I do it as well. The ellipsises of death. =)
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dogglebe
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 5:31pm
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You can always break up the conversation with a little bit of action, so it's not one long block of talk. John walks up to the kitchen table, where the twin pizza boxes lay. He holds his phone against his ear. JOHN I didn't say that... That's not what I said.... What did I say...? He flips open the first box. A large pie with onions. JOHN I said two large pies with onions and meatball. He flips open the second. A large pie with meatballs. JOHN No, you sent me one large onion and one large meatball. Phil
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Dreamscale
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 6:40pm
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Or, of course, the old "(beat)", which although irritating for sure (and space consuming), may look cleaner.
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dogglebe
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 6:45pm
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'beats' are more used to show a pause prior to someone talking, rather than giving the pause during dialog. Phil
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Dreamscale
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 7:01pm
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I was (am) not aware of that, Phil. As far as I know, a "beat" is interchangeable with an ellipse. To me, an ellipse shows a pause in a single person's dialogue, as in... MaiLai So...you want the special, or the extra special, tonight? I give very good extra special.
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Colkurtz8
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 7:29pm
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So...you want the special, or the extra special, tonight? I give very good extra special.
Fu?k the ellipse and beat debate, I want to hear more from Jeffrey.
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Dreamscale
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 7:53pm
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What's up, Col? Long time, buddy. You doing OK? Any new scripts on the horizon?
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dogglebe
Posted: August 13th, 2010, 8:32pm
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'Beats' are generally used to show pause before someone speaks. DAD Joey, your dog died. JOEY (beat) Sparky died? NOTE: No animals were harmed in the making of this post. Phil
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