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Writers of SS - I once again ask you to share your great wisdom with me
My "lost in space" sci-fi series sees 8 Aliens thrust together against their will. One of the first big problems they have, communication - they all speak different languages.
Now. I want the characters to talk, (they will attempt to talk to each other, even if they quickly discover no one has a clue what they are saying). But unsure of how to handle it.
I don't want the audience to know what they are saying either (apart from the human who speaks English) so there will be no subtitles.
My immediate thought is to just write out the dialogue in English (with some kind of note that it's alien, not subtitled). The reason being it will help me with writing the story and it would be useful for directors/actors to know what a character is saying, even if the audience will never know. The characters eventually find a way to communicate (most of them anyway) so dialogue can commence as normal later on.
Writing it out in English seems a better way to go than making up some jibberish language and typing that.
Thoughts?
P.S if you can think of any scripts that deal with alien languages in a similar way, please let me know so I can have a read.
Remember that you’re writing for the reader first - if you give us the dialogue in advance then it’ll take away from the impact of your reveal, especially if the English translation of their alien speak has no bearing on the story. There are many ways to convey the frustration of the situation without spelling it out in dialogue.
Remember that you�re writing for the reader first - if you give us the dialogue in advance then it�ll take away from the impact of your reveal, especially if the English translation of their alien speak has no bearing on the story. There are many ways to convey the frustration of the situation without spelling it out in dialogue.
Thanks for the input - the dialogue won't convey any important information, and the action will show the frustration of the scene.
I guess I want dialogue in there to break up the action sequences as well, but thought some gobbledygook would annoy people.
Quoted Text
Cassius and Barak both get to thier feet.
Barak has the pistol, aims it at Cassius's head.
Barak (Alien language) Who are you! Who are you!
Cassius I don't understand! Please, put the gun down
Barak's hand trembles. Cassius takes a step towards him--
--BANG
Or.....
Quoted Text
Cassius and Barak both get to thier feet.
Barak has the pistol, aims it at Cassius's head.
Barak Fho shun goridder! Fho shun goridder!
Cassius I don't understand! Please, put the gun down
Barak's hand trembles. Cassius takes a step towards him--
--BANG
Or....
Quoted Text
Cassius and Barak both get to thier feet.
Barak has the pistol. He yells in an alien language as he points it at Cassius's head.
Cassius I don't understand! Please, put the gun down
Barak's hand trembles. Cassius takes a step towards him--
--BANG
There are quite a few instances of trying to commuincate with each other. Don't get me wrong, there are obviously no full blown conversations, mostly just blurted out frustrations or failed attempts at reasoning.
If you're wanting it to be intentionally vague at first, don't write it as dialogue all. Instead, just indicate it in the action/narrative.
ZIB-ZORB, an insectoid alien, speaks in a series of rapid-fire clicks and ticks, while MEEP-MORP, an anthropomorphic sponge with a simian head, speaks a language comprised primarily of slurps and grunts. Only JOE, a human translator, can understand what either are saying.
I like the middle one. It conveys exactly what you’re going for - and the alien language actually seems to get the point across as to what he’s saying. And yeah, you can break it up with action to help further emphasize what he’s saying, even if it is alien gibberish, which doesn’t look half bad, imo.
If you're wanting it to be intentionally vague at first, don't write it as dialogue all. Instead, just indicate it in the action/narrative.
ZIB-ZORB, an insectoid alien, speaks in a series of rapid-fire clicks and ticks, while MEEP-MORP, an anthropomorphic sponge with a simian head, speaks a language comprised primarily of slurps and grunts. Only JOE, a human translator, can understand what either are saying.
Think you got some good advice there. If you still want to see pro script variations, here's a few that come to mind that might have alien talking in one form or another...
Galaxy Quest, District 9, Men In Black Series, Thor: Ragnarok, The Fifth Element.
A lot of good advice here for this special problem.
Note: I would seriously consider not trying to have as many as eight species speaking different languages as it is hard for me to envision even with the perfect version how this will not be incredibly confusing.
In terms of the solution - as you can see there are several - If it were me, I'd just write it first something akin to:
VULCAN Vulcan vulcan vulcan.
MARTIAN Martian martian martian
etc. i.e., don't waste a lot of the time on the solution until you are done with the story. Then after you write the story see which of the above best fits in terms of reading clarity.
Think you got some good advice there. If you still want to see pro script variations, here's a few that come to mind that might have alien talking in one form or another...
Galaxy Quest, District 9, Men In Black Series, Thor: Ragnarok, The Fifth Element.
Galaxy quest!! love that movie
Thanks for the list, will pour through them and see what I can find.
A lot of good advice here for this special problem.
Note: I would seriously consider not trying to have as many as eight species speaking different languages as it is hard for me to envision even with the perfect version how this will not be incredibly confusing.
In terms of the solution - as you can see there are several - If it were me, I'd just write it first something akin to:
VULCAN Vulcan vulcan vulcan.
MARTIAN Martian martian martian
etc. i.e., don't waste a lot of the time on the solution until you are done with the story. Then after you write the story see which of the above best fits in terms of reading clarity.
Thanks, Dave. It's not as bad as I am making it out to be... the immediate situation is frantic and so, they are just trying to survive (no room for talking) - then the situation forces them to break off into small groups. We then follow each small group... so hopefully not too convoluted and confusing lol
Thanks for the list, will pour through them and see what I can find.
Thanks, Dave. It's not as bad as I am making it out to be... the immediate situation is frantic and so, they are just trying to survive (no room for talking) - then the situation forces them to break off into small groups. We then follow each small group... so hopefully not too convoluted and confusing lol
...don't waste a lot of the time on the solution until you are done with the story.
This is great writing advice in general. Lots of writers get to a point where they're not sure how to write a certain scene or moment or detail, so they stop writing altogether as they struggle to address it. All that does is kill your moment and stymie your progress. There's nothing wrong with plugging in a place-holder and coming back to it later. My first drafts almost always contain a varying number of "ADD DESCRIPTION LATER"s, "BLAH BLAH BLAH" s, etc.
Remember that your first draft is all about getting what's in your head on paper, tout suite. There's a reason it's often called the "vomit draft." You're jus throwing all your ideas onto the page. If you hit a snag, skip over it and keep writing. You'll fix it in the revisions.
This is great writing advice in general. Lots of writers get to a point where they're not sure how to write a certain scene or moment or detail, so they stop writing altogether as they struggle to address it. All that does is kill your moment and stymie your progress. There's nothing wrong with plugging in a place-holder and coming back to it later. My first drafts almost always contain a varying number of "ADD DESCRIPTION LATER"s, "BLAH BLAH BLAH" s, etc.
Remember that your first draft is all about getting what's in your head on paper, tout suite. There's a reason it's often called the "vomit draft." You're jus throwing all your ideas onto the page. If you hit a snag, skip over it and keep writing. You'll fix it in the revisions.
For me that is certainly true - use to stare at the page for an hour trying to be perfect - now I just change the FONT to red and type what first comes to mind and come back to it later