I was expecting a dark ending due to the profanity and the GPS read to me like something sinister was going on. The pace was OK but the swearing did need reeling in or totally taking out.
The translation of "one location" has been fast and loose (and that's ok with me now) but this one really does break that rule however you translate it.
If the whole thing was just in the car that would be ok - I can see that the scene in the kitchen tried to set him up as a technophobe but that was then further established with the garage door opener thingy (could have used a cell phone or the car radio to further illustrate this if it was needed).
Having said that, I did quite like this and it raced through it to skip the repetitive swearing but also to get to the crunch which unfortunately left me feeling flat. But that was probably my fault for having a preconception that it was a darker script.
Great idea which needs a bit more "meat" to go with the vegetables.

This has so much potential, but its flavor was ruined by all of the swears. Really, I do think it's funny though and realistic. Those GPS's can do all kinds of crazy things and yes, some people love to use them as toys.

I like the title and it was entertaining.

Sandra

Like others I thought this has some potential but the shouting started to get to me.

The fact they arrive home but only realise it once stopped ( if I read that correctly) seemed unlikely.

Worth a rewrite to see what options  can be squeezed out.

All the best

No attempt at one location -- don't really feel like reading.  I've read the ones that could be argued as one setting but this doesn't even bother.

I like the pace of this, the build up of rage seems believable.  The mechanical devices are defiant in a way that seems right on the mark.  For a short script, I think this works.

meh, the writer should have thought about this a little more before submitting it.  

Good attempt, bit I'm not a huge fan. My biggest problem (aside from the location thing) is that the whole bit in the house doesn't add anything to the story (and as was mentioned, you could've cut it and gotten away with the car-as-location).

HTH

I got a couple of chuckles out of it and one really, really good laugh, but that's about all.

Out of the thirteen or so that I've read, I think this is the only one that's broken the rules of the OWC.  Even if you were thinking of a green screen, it still won't work as one location because you already have a house and garage doors opening and closing, then the car changing lanes on the highway later.  To show changing lanes, you'd need an EXT. shot, requiring another location to shoot it.

OWC aside, I like Gabe's (Mr. Ripley's) idea about having Vic start out mild-mannered, then not get angry until the GPS starts telling him wrong directions.  It would give him a little more of a character arc.

Was it funny?  Yeah.  Like I said, I chuckled and laughed, but I don't think it follows the OWC criteria.

- Mark

Didn't really do it for me either. I'll disregard the whole location thing, this obviously violated the requirement.

But all in all, it wasn't really all that funny. Something sinister going on with a GPS taking you to where it wants to go would've been an intriguing premise. But this is just two incompetent end users arguing.

The dialogue wasn't bad, though. And it wasn't badly written overall. It just seemed a bit of a waste.

The core idea here had some potential. It could be an amusing short but you'd need to rejig it and give us something at the end. They drive around and end up back at their place. There's no lesson or stakes for us to relate to. That's why it fell flat for me. The charactersation was pretty good, albeit rather generic. Preference aside for how they engaged, your characters felt like they knew one another and the exchanges felt real.

They were a couple of references to Britishness, so perhaps you have a fondness for all things British - as if you could not! Or maybe you're just British. At a couple of points it felt like you were creating a facetious character in the GPS and that would be angle I would look at in a rewrite - how to develop a comically Machiavellian GPS that leaves us questioning Vic's sanity.

I thought there was a good idea in here, and this got a few smiles out of me, but the joke wore thin fairly quickly and the back and forth got pretty repetitive.  I think this could be pretty good short with a some reworking.

Leon

For a comedy this didn't work for me, but different people like different things. The one line that did make me chuckle was when Danielle said 'surprise'. I could just picture that one.

The main problem for me was I didn't like either of the characters, you needed to connect me to them better. Vic in particular just shouts and swears, I hate people like that in real life and this applies here.

Sort the characters out and this could be okay. Not sure if it's within the rules though.

Arty.