I didn't mean the type-casting thing as a complaint.  This is really good, and I like it

Haha. I was waiting for someone to catch that. Good work.
What did you think of the script overall?

Quoted from Old Time Wesley Trust me, in time Simply Noir will look like A Uwe Boll film...

I am with George here...I am sure you don't mean this as a slam, but I think I take exception with this statement just the same....

Andrew, looks like you've been taking some hits on this one.  I don't think it is all that bad, considering how quick you wrote it, but at the same time, it does feel a bit rushed.

And I really have to question your strategy of saying, "If you think this one was bad...check this one out!"  But anyway, on with the:

[SPOILERS]

*  Ah, I left a tip and a wink.  So you were paying attention.
*  I like having George as a contract killer.  Heck, I'd hire him.
*  Oh boy, you might have to answer to Andy on this one...
*  Sh*t...I thought I was going to be the hero.  Oh well, at least it looks like I took a few people out with me.
*  I got the last line, and I loved it.  If you actually meant to imply some sly commentary regarding all of us here at S.S., I think this is the best joke in the whole darn script.  Very funny.

So this wasn't the best of these, but I liked it just fine, even if parts were a tad random.  But getting back to the "rushed" thing -- past history shows how eager you are to get your new stuff out -- submitting within hours of typing your final fade.

You are clever, no doubt about it, but you need to get a handle on your enthusiasm.  If you set your completed works aside for a little while -- then return to them and revise accordingly -- I would think you couldn't help but improve.

Try it with your next piece and see if you don't agree.

Thanks a lot for checking it out Bert and i am glad you enjoyed it. I agree with you on how eager i am. I am so focused on how it will and i want it done a.s.a.p. The script i have in the works now (crossing the frame) is almost done but not everything is done. I have 30 pages written but it's just the basic storyline. I still need to take things out, add sub plots and violence, drama and what not. So i have basicly a 30 page extended plot which i need to expand to a script. When i finish it i will check it everyday for a week or two and make sure everything is top notch. I really want this script to do good.

The main reason for this (TMOSS) is to entertain. The storyline was important but i was more focused on the bogus situations and what not. So i'll say i succeeded and failed. 50/50

Again thank you for taking your time and i'm not doing a rewrite but another SS story with more effort and i won't rush it. I just don't think everyone will reread this even if i make it better.


Andrew

Is it just me, or has #747 appeared in The Mystery Of Simply Scripts and SimplyNoir, even more, they are both at the ending!

Wow, when I rewrite it I can use these scripts as a marketing tool!

#747 didn't appear in SS vs. GM, however, you did, and you were spectacular.

Please send check or money order to:

Mike Shelton
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Takeaguess, IL US

You're welcome.

Quoted from bert *  Oh boy, you might have to answer to Andy on this one...

Uh-oh... I will read this as soon as I can... a bit scared now.... sheesh...  

xxx

oh boy. should i run now or later?

Quoted from Antemasque oh boy. should i run now or later?

OMG. There I was thinking you were going to reassure me and now I get the feeling that I'm in for some grilling..... no more love for doctor Jones then, huh?  

I'll take it with a pinch of salt, lol...

Funny little script. This outsider go the jokes! All the gripes have been posted before me so I won't bore you.
Seriously somebody needs to write there own version of 747.

I like your script Andrew it was a very good reading.

I have just a comment about my participation in it: the graft where I appear reminded me the old years when I was child and my dear father was a manager of a B- movies theater.  Sometimes, he grafted to a movie a different scene of other movie  in order to complete the lost scene ( scratched by the film projector ) and its length – as if you was very attentive seen a thriller and suddenly, entered part of a Western movies!

Very fanny!

Oh, Andy. I'm sure you will get a laugh from what i did to your character. I mean who didn't laugh at Andy at least ONCE in this script? Huh? Huh?

i'm incapable of laughter of any sort. JK JK. I got a laugh out of the goonies refrerences although already mentioned in mystery of simply' Your probably getting enough of that. There's only so much you can do with these simply scripters scripts, I'm not blaming you for emulating what they did entirely. The things that you can poke fun of in people are usually the most obvious.

Nice and funny but i detected that a certain character was missing...looks around....hmmmm.