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Stoned Patriots (currently 3770 views) |
Nixon |
Posted: March 27th, 2006, 6:49am |
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LocationWashington Posts1395 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
I just submitted another revision of the first Stoned Patriots. Some mistakes were corrected and some new lines were also added. I kind of took Bert's idea and ran with it.
* The bit about the money was kind of funny. I think you could have had Washington see Franklin on the 100 -- and himself on the 1 -- and be like, "What the f*ck?"
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thegardenstate89 |
Posted: March 27th, 2006, 12:56pm |
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I just read this. Hilarious. I loved how you managed to make our forefathers speak in a manner apropriate to their time and when they're lighting up just like any group of friends would. A very funny stoner script.
I would love to see a sequel to this. Perhaps the founding fathers go to congress to legalize marijuana? Just an idea. |
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Turtle |
Posted: March 27th, 2006, 1:27pm |
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Locationhere Posts25 Posts Per Day 0.00 |
All i can say is WOW! I loved it! Had me falling out of my seat laughing.
I kept imagining "Jay and Silent Bob".
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Nixon |
Posted: March 27th, 2006, 2:00pm |
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LocationWashington Posts1395 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
Thanks for the read guys. I am glade you guys liked it.
Quoted from thegardenstate89 I would love to see a sequel to this.
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Actually a sequel is already on the way. Wesley and myself have been working on SP2: American Haze-Zavier |
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Nixon |
Posted: March 27th, 2006, 4:13pm |
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LocationWashington Posts1395 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
Whoa that was fast. Thanks to Don for getting the revision up so fast. -Zavier |
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Curse |
Posted: May 9th, 2006, 2:06pm |
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New Acclaim RIP 1987-2004
LocationFYRO macedonia Posts103 Posts Per Day 0.02 |
Hello! I read this script, and it was great. Here's why: *SPOILERS* The characters were well done. Their dialouge was fantastic, correct - and quirky! Some of the speech was brilliantly done - and lots of it made me laugh. The story was weird - but great! It was nicely done - and well planned me thinks. Each thing is put together neatly - and there weren't any loose ends that you needed to tie up at the end. Patriots on drugs? Never heard of it - until Nixon created it. And thank-god he did! Every characters lines are snappy and funny. My favourite character would have to be the talking, magical bong. I really didn't expect it to start talking! That was the greatest part for me. Also the car scene, it was really funny. "Not that break!" - I love the way the Bong just randomly decides to begin talking. I noticed only once tiny error. It was a form of there, their, and they're. I believe you used their, but it should've been 'there'. Anyway, who cares about that! It was a great script - detailed wonderfully and efficiently. Great job! Curse! |
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Nixon |
Posted: May 10th, 2006, 1:07pm |
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LocationWashington Posts1395 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
Thanks for the review Curse, Im glad you enjoyed it.
-Zavier |
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James Fields |
Posted: May 20th, 2006, 8:41pm |
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I can't stop laughing dude. This is some of the funniest stuff I have read in my entire life. It appears you have a sequel coming out soon. Awesome dude. This is the funniest script I have read so far.
For a small review since I'm not the guy who reviews page for page.
Dialogue flows great, the action is great, and it is funny. No spelling or grammar errors that I can see in plain view. Nice work you have here. Can't wait for the next part to this silly story. |
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I finally found the title for my short.
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Nixon |
Posted: May 20th, 2006, 9:21pm |
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LocationWashington Posts1395 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
Thanks for the read, glade you liked it.
It appears you have a sequel coming out soon. Awesome dude. This is the funniest script I have read so far.
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Yeah, there is a sequel on the way. It should be done relatively soon. Thanks again for the read. -Zavier |
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James Fields |
Posted: May 20th, 2006, 9:27pm |
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Anytime. Do you have any other scripts here on the site? |
| Coming Soon:
I finally found the title for my short.
Acronym- You've been warned...
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Nixon |
Posted: May 20th, 2006, 9:34pm |
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LocationWashington Posts1395 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
Yeah, there is one in the Westerns. That board could always use a few more post. It's called Random Pain. It was an entry for the One Week Writing Exercise Thing back in January. Do you have anything up yet, that I could look at? -Zavier |
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James Fields |
Posted: May 20th, 2006, 9:42pm |
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| Coming Soon:
I finally found the title for my short.
Acronym- You've been warned...
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darthbrion |
Posted: May 25th, 2006, 8:41pm |
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without a doubt one of, if not the best shorts I've read yet! a great story and a cool band name I might add. I can't begin to tell you how many times my bong, uh, nevermind.... anyway loved the script and I hope to see the second installment soon! brion |
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Nixon |
Posted: May 25th, 2006, 9:38pm |
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LocationWashington Posts1395 Posts Per Day 0.24 |
Thanks Brion, I'm glade you enjoyed it.
I hope to see the second installment soon!
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The second installment has been submitted, so it should be up with the next batch of scripts. -Zavier |
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FilmMaker06 |
Posted: May 26th, 2006, 8:32pm |
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This was a quick and easy little read. The subject matter isn't exactly my type of film, but I figured I'd check it out just to check it out.
Once American Haze comes out I'll check it out. Hopefully it'll be as easy a read as this was. You did a great job.
Dialogue was pretty good. Characters, for as short of a script this was, were pretty well developed, and overall it was pretty funny.
Good job and good luck on future writing!
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