Hey Joe,
A good germ of a script here. I think there needs to be a bit more though. Like I would like to see some of the trial. Just to get a feeling for the other characters. It might also be good if you foreshadow the fact that his lawyer is in cahoots with them. I don't really think you need to extend the torture scene but it would probably please some folks.
Well done, good start, looking forward to reading the revision. |