Hi Brymo,
My first question was, how much research did you put into this? Then I read that these were thoughts that popped into your head from observations.
Anyway, it was a good script, the ending was good. But the S&M seemed kinda tame. Not much went on, a few cracks here and there. But nothing really happened.
Maybe you could do a sequel and drive this up a few gears. Let Molly add more material so much so to put Frank off the S&M scene and maybe Molly will get her wish after all.
Also, your title has Miss Molly and you start off with A WOMAN. Why? We already know her name.
All the best,
Javier |