Thanks bro for checking this out. Been busy with a lot of other projects, so I never got a chance to get back to this one and do some rewrites. Good feedback, I'll definitely use it once I get back this short...

Holy shit, am I old.

Well, this was written way back in 2009 and I'd pretty much forgot about the script until some college kids out in India decided to ask permission to shoot it. I normally charge $, but the script pretty much collected dust for 10 years (I do make certain considerations for film students). And I kinda wrote this just fucking around.

Anyway, the script is a little confusing, as is the film. But it is kinda neat. And it's a strong effort by the filmmakers. The production quality turned out pretty nice.



-- Michael

Indeed you're old, lol.

Will watch this soon.

Not my cup of tea genre-wise, but they did a real nice job with it.  Just a little slow in the first half - I think they could have spend it up a teeny bit,

Funny seeing credits for "script mentors" -  hadn't seen that before.

Quoted Text Not my cup of tea genre-wise, but they did a real nice job with it.  Just a little slow in the first half - I think they could have spend it up a teeny bit, Funny seeing credits for "script mentors" -  hadn't seen that before.

Yeah, I think this could've used some more editing, both at the beginning and the end... probably should've been closer to 7-8 minutes.

Yeah, I was confused by that "script mentors" thing. Still not sure what that means. Oh, well.

-- Michael

Haha, not bad Michael. To be honest, after reading your take on it, I was pleasantly surprised how it turned out.  Such a nice, simple concept and the acting had peril, intensity, and I thought overall they did a nice job with this. And I didn’t even look behind me, either.  

Just imagine that happening in real life.

Anywayz, congrats-A

I did it 10 years before Jordan Peele! Lol

I was also pleasantly surprised with the way it turned out. But I had go back 10 years to read the script again to see if there was any clarity in the script that didn't translate to the screen... and there wasn't lol. Still, it's a weird story w/ some cool shit in it, nonetheless. And it was the director's first film! So kudos to her. It was weird, though, talking to them and having everybody call me sir... I'm not that old!

-- Michael

Congrats, Michael.

They captured the confusion of your script very well lol.

Just kidding. They did a good job.

Quoted Text Congrats, Michael. They captured the confusion of your script very well lol. Just kidding. They did a good job.

Lol thanks Breanna. It is weird revisiting a script you wrote over a decade ago. While it helps me realize how far I've come as a writer, which is good, I also realized I wasn't that bad, either. Definitely rough around the edges in all facets, but the ideas were kinda there.

Yeah, the young'ns who filmed it were very sweet in approaching me about the script and really surprised me by how good of a job they did, especially the young director Vitasta -- I believe this was her directorial debut (could be mistaken though). I don't really put too much into short scripts/short films -- I only write them to fill time in between my main focus (features) or if I think I could turn it into a feature. But it's always nice to see something you wrote on screen and is a nice filler in between feature film releases (which take FOREVER... and come far and few between).

Thanks again for checking it out and sticking through it!

-- Michael

Checked this out, the production value isn't bad at all. As far as the story goes though, I have no idea what I just watched and what the overall idea is. I was waiting for some kind of big reveal, but then it just ended :/

Michael.

Strange yet interesting nice read.

My 2 cents in.. BREAKING THE RULES - I agree with you as I'm sure most do, and or that break the rules themselves as I do. Some scripts / stories "require" breaking the rules here and there to better get a "point" across. It should take nothing away form a well written script of a good story.

Checked this out.

Initially, I thought this was a classic case of doppleganger but slowly can to know this was about the man's innerself trying to warn him about the danger. At the end, it turned bad for him. I'm not completely sure about this. Need verification.

I also noticed the starting of the film was a bit different than that of the script and no cat either. All of this is understandable. Shooting constraints.

Congrats Michael.  

Not bad, Michael. Felt very slow to me. As a student, good job though.

Quoted from eldave1 Funny seeing credits for "script mentors" -  hadn't seen that before.

They're most probably the faculty members/professors who teach them screenwriting at that school. They've been credited either to please or as a part of gratitude.