SimplyScripts Discussion Board
Blog Home - Produced Movie Script Library - TV Scripts - Unproduced Scripts - Contact - Site Map
ScriptSearch
Welcome, Guest.
It is October 15th, 2021, 10:19pm
Please login or register.
Was PortalRecent PostsHome Help Calendar Search Register Login
Please do read the guidelines that govern behavior on the discussion board. It will make for a much more pleasant experience for everyone. A word about SimplyScripts and Censorship


Produced Script Database (Updated!)
🦇 The Halloween 2021 One Week Challenge 🎃
theme has been announced!
Scripts due to simplyscripts.com/owc in ...

Short Script of the Day | Featured Script of the Month | Featured Short Scripts Available for Production
Submit Your Script

How do I get my film's link and banner here?
All screenplays on the simplyscripts.com and simplyscripts.net domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.
Forum Login
Username: Create a new Account
Password:     Forgot Password

SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    Unproduced Screenplay Discussion    Short Scripts  ›  Look Behind You - Filmed Moderators: bert
Users Browsing Forum
No Members and 3 Guests

 Pages: « 1, 2 : All
Recommend Print
  Author    Look Behind You - Filmed  (currently 2242 views)
spesh2k
Posted: August 8th, 2009, 10:46pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Harlem USA
Posts
1189
Posts Per Day
0.24
Thanks bro for checking this out. Been busy with a lot of other projects, so I never got a chance to get back to this one and do some rewrites. Good feedback, I'll definitely use it once I get back this short...


THE SUICIDE THEORY (Amazon Prime, 79% Rotten Tomatoes) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt2517300/?ref_=nm_knf_i1
RAGE (Coming Feb. 2021) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt8874764/?ref_=nm_knf_i2

Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 15 - 27
spesh2k
Posted: May 20th, 2020, 3:08pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Harlem USA
Posts
1189
Posts Per Day
0.24
Holy shit, am I old.

Well, this was written way back in 2009 and I'd pretty much forgot about the script until some college kids out in India decided to ask permission to shoot it. I normally charge $, but the script pretty much collected dust for 10 years (I do make certain considerations for film students). And I kinda wrote this just fucking around.

Anyway, the script is a little confusing, as is the film. But it is kinda neat. And it's a strong effort by the filmmakers. The production quality turned out pretty nice.



-- Michael


THE SUICIDE THEORY (Amazon Prime, 79% Rotten Tomatoes) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt2517300/?ref_=nm_knf_i1
RAGE (Coming Feb. 2021) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt8874764/?ref_=nm_knf_i2

Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 16 - 27
Yuvraj
Posted: May 20th, 2020, 3:18pm Report to Moderator
Been Around



Location
At my desk
Posts
573
Posts Per Day
0.88
Indeed you're old, lol.

Will watch this soon.


Logged
Private Message Reply: 17 - 27
eldave1
Posted: May 20th, 2020, 4:38pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Southern California
Posts
6911
Posts Per Day
2.63
Not my cup of tea genre-wise, but they did a real nice job with it.  Just a little slow in the first half - I think they could have spend it up a teeny bit,

Funny seeing credits for "script mentors" -  hadn't seen that before.



My Scripts can all be seen here:

http://dlambertson.wix.com/scripts
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 18 - 27
spesh2k
Posted: May 20th, 2020, 4:46pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Harlem USA
Posts
1189
Posts Per Day
0.24

Quoted Text
Not my cup of tea genre-wise, but they did a real nice job with it.  Just a little slow in the first half - I think they could have spend it up a teeny bit,

Funny seeing credits for "script mentors" -  hadn't seen that before.


Yeah, I think this could've used some more editing, both at the beginning and the end... probably should've been closer to 7-8 minutes.

Yeah, I was confused by that "script mentors" thing. Still not sure what that means. Oh, well.

-- Michael


THE SUICIDE THEORY (Amazon Prime, 79% Rotten Tomatoes) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt2517300/?ref_=nm_knf_i1
RAGE (Coming Feb. 2021) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt8874764/?ref_=nm_knf_i2

Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 19 - 27
_ghostwriters
Posted: May 20th, 2020, 6:03pm Report to Moderator
Old Timer



Location
A helluva long way from LA
Posts
1233
Posts Per Day
0.27
Haha, not bad Michael. To be honest, after reading your take on it, I was pleasantly surprised how it turned out.  Such a nice, simple concept and the acting had peril, intensity, and I thought overall they did a nice job with this. And I didnít even look behind me, either.  

Just imagine that happening in real life.

Anywayz, congrats-A


Logged
Private Message Reply: 20 - 27
spesh2k
Posted: May 20th, 2020, 6:07pm Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Harlem USA
Posts
1189
Posts Per Day
0.24
I did it 10 years before Jordan Peele! Lol

I was also pleasantly surprised with the way it turned out. But I had go back 10 years to read the script again to see if there was any clarity in the script that didn't translate to the screen... and there wasn't lol. Still, it's a weird story w/ some cool shit in it, nonetheless. And it was the director's first film! So kudos to her. It was weird, though, talking to them and having everybody call me sir... I'm not that old!

-- Michael


THE SUICIDE THEORY (Amazon Prime, 79% Rotten Tomatoes) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt2517300/?ref_=nm_knf_i1
RAGE (Coming Feb. 2021) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt8874764/?ref_=nm_knf_i2

Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 21 - 27
Breanne Mattson
Posted: May 21st, 2020, 8:22pm Report to Moderator
Old Timer



Posts
1347
Posts Per Day
0.23
Congrats, Michael.

They captured the confusion of your script very well lol.

Just kidding. They did a good job.


Logged
Private Message Reply: 22 - 27
spesh2k
Posted: May 25th, 2020, 12:59am Report to Moderator
January Project Group



Location
Harlem USA
Posts
1189
Posts Per Day
0.24

Quoted Text
Congrats, Michael.

They captured the confusion of your script very well lol.

Just kidding. They did a good job.


Lol thanks Breanna. It is weird revisiting a script you wrote over a decade ago. While it helps me realize how far I've come as a writer, which is good, I also realized I wasn't that bad, either. Definitely rough around the edges in all facets, but the ideas were kinda there.

Yeah, the young'ns who filmed it were very sweet in approaching me about the script and really surprised me by how good of a job they did, especially the young director Vitasta -- I believe this was her directorial debut (could be mistaken though). I don't really put too much into short scripts/short films -- I only write them to fill time in between my main focus (features) or if I think I could turn it into a feature. But it's always nice to see something you wrote on screen and is a nice filler in between feature film releases (which take FOREVER... and come far and few between).

Thanks again for checking it out and sticking through it!

-- Michael


THE SUICIDE THEORY (Amazon Prime, 79% Rotten Tomatoes) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt2517300/?ref_=nm_knf_i1
RAGE (Coming Feb. 2021) https://www.imdb.com/title/tt8874764/?ref_=nm_knf_i2

Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 23 - 27
Warren
Posted: May 25th, 2020, 3:27am Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients


A man who has taught his mind to misbehave

Location
Sydney, Australia
Posts
3559
Posts Per Day
1.82
Checked this out, the production value isn't bad at all. As far as the story goes though, I have no idea what I just watched and what the overall idea is. I was waiting for some kind of big reveal, but then it just ended :/


Logged
Private Message Reply: 24 - 27
BarryJohn
Posted: May 25th, 2020, 6:15am Report to Moderator
New


Who am I? A man with a hundred stories..

Location
South Africa
Posts
328
Posts Per Day
0.31
Michael.

Strange yet interesting nice read.

My 2 cents in.. BREAKING THE RULES - I agree with you as I'm sure most do, and or that break the rules themselves as I do. Some scripts / stories "require" breaking the rules here and there to better get a "point" across. It should take nothing away form a well written script of a good story.


Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 25 - 27
Yuvraj
Posted: May 25th, 2020, 6:17am Report to Moderator
Been Around



Location
At my desk
Posts
573
Posts Per Day
0.88
Checked this out.

Initially, I thought this was a classic case of doppleganger but slowly can to know this was about the man's innerself trying to warn him about the danger. At the end, it turned bad for him. I'm not completely sure about this. Need verification.

I also noticed the starting of the film was a bit different than that of the script and no cat either. All of this is understandable. Shooting constraints.

Congrats Michael.  


Logged
Private Message Reply: 26 - 27
Fais85
Posted: May 25th, 2020, 6:53am Report to Moderator
New



Location
India
Posts
193
Posts Per Day
0.20
Not bad, Michael. Felt very slow to me. As a student, good job though.


Quoted from eldave1
Funny seeing credits for "script mentors" -  hadn't seen that before.


They're most probably the faculty members/professors who teach them screenwriting at that school. They've been credited either to please or as a part of gratitude.
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 27 - 27
 Pages: « 1, 2 : All
Recommend Print

Locked Board Board Index    Short Scripts  [ previous | next ] Switch to:
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login

Forum Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post polls
You may not post attachments
HTML is on
Blah Code is on
Smilies are on


Powered by E-Blah Platinum 9.71B © 2001-2006