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The formatting needs work. Dialogue doesn't stretch from side to side.
Character names are CAPITALIZED when introduced. One raft or many?
Large blocks of action put off readers. Generally, we try to limit action blocks to 4 lines or fewer.
You describe two animals armies of various exotic and fantastic creatures. Find a simpler way to describe this?
And we get to another session of fantastic things that are described but are not shown in battle. I think the idea would be to not spend so much time on naming these things but showing them in action. We don't care about the number and size. We care about what they do.
They both join tanukis (raccoon dogs) that can disguise
themselves as inanimate objects plus expand their indestructible
scrotums to use them for almost anything as depicted in
I'm just wondering what one could possibly do with an indestructible scrotum. It would be good to pull out at parties, I suppose, but that's about all I can think of.
Lots to learn here in regard to format... but you're on the road now, might as well keep going. Read lots of screenplays to see how they are written. I'm guessing that you're still young, so you have plenty of time.
Also, participate around here and you'll learn a lot faster. A year or two, as opposed to several on your own.