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Octonauts: Origins - Episode 1: The Invitation to the Convention by Fernando da Rocha da Costa - Short, Action, Animation, Fantasy, Comedy, Sci-Fi, Children and Youth - The future Octonauts receive invitations to a convention, beginning their journey towards friendship and adventure. 5 pages - pdf format
New writer interested in feedback on this work, please be nice
I like this also, even though the alignment seems out of sync with normal screenplay formatting. Also I think you need to size up the text and carry on. Pleasant story though.
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First and foremost, your "script" is not written in screenplay format. No screenplay software/program was used—you wrote it in Doc form. Because of this, I did not even read your story, no matter how good it may be. Simply put, this is not a screenplay. You MUST write in screenplay format. A good FREE screenplay software for you to download is http://www.trelby.com. It's a basic beginner's screenplay software that is simple to learn and operate - and delivers 100% script/screenplay formatting standards. Download it... and rewrite your story using it. Re-send it for another "re-write" review. All the best. And remember, keep writing... keep writing.
I trust you'll take my constructive criticism as just that.
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Fernando, hope you don't mind but I took the shocking liberty of reformatting your script (via Fade In).
Other than the formatting, I made no changes, aside from removing the quotation marks around your dialogue. Everything else remains just as you wrote it.
Wow, that's very generous, DB. If I may say, I don't think you needed to copy all the CUT TOs. Plus there is the fact that Fernando never made an appearance. I hope he does.
My god, I know, right? Three entire pages (plus title)...
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If I may say, I don't think you needed to copy all the CUT TOs.
There are several other corrections I could have made but it's not my script, so felt it best to leave it intact, minus the quotation marks (and a trimmed parenthetical).
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Plus there is the fact that Fernando never made an appearance. I hope he does.
Same. This place gets too quiet in between events.