SimplyScripts Discussion Board
Blog Home - Produced Movie Script Library - TV Scripts - Unproduced Scripts - Contact - Site Map
ScriptSearch
Welcome, Guest.
It is January 22nd, 2020, 7:32am
Please login or register.
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login
If you wish to join this discussion board, please send me a message. Please do read the guidelines that govern behavior on the discussion board. It will make for a much more pleasant experience for everyone. A word about SimplyScripts and Censorship


Scripts Studios are posting for 2019 - 2020 award consideration
The January One Week Challenge is on

Scripts due to SimplyScripts.com/OWC



Short Script of the Day | Featured Script of the Month | Featured Short Scripts Available for Production | Submit Your Script

How do I get my film's link and banner here?
All screenplays on the simplyscripts.com and simplyscripts.net domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.
Forum Login
Username: Create a new Account
Password:     Forgot Password

SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    Unproduced Screenplay Discussion    Short Comedy Scripts  ›  An Unexpected Party - Optioned
Users Browsing Forum
No Members and 1 Guests

 Pages: 1
Recommend Print
  Author    An Unexpected Party - Optioned  (currently 206 views)
Don
Posted: December 11th, 2019, 3:59pm Report to Moderator
Administrator
Administrator


So, what are you writing?

Location
Virginia
Posts
13495
Posts Per Day
1.95
An Unexpected Party by William David Glenn IV - Short, Comedy - A low level businessman just wants to relax after a hard week of work, but is interrupted by his rowdy neighbors who take over his apartment and force him to plot to end the party and his nightmare. 8 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work



Visit SimplyScripts.com for what is new on the site.


-------------
You will miss 100% of the shots you don't take.
- Wayne Gretzky

Revision History (1 edits)
Don  -  January 11th, 2020, 9:59am
Logged
Site Private Message
JohnMcCarthy
Posted: December 16th, 2019, 2:22pm Report to Moderator
New-ish



Location
Madison, WI
Posts
16
Posts Per Day
0.26
I don't think you need the CUT TO: or JUMP CUT TO: and I think you meant to say the the coffee table "wobbled" instead of "waddled" but other than that, I liked it. A lot! Chuckled throughout and laughed out loud at the Chef in full chef's regalia!
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 1 - 6
MarkRenshaw
Posted: January 10th, 2020, 6:51am Report to Moderator
Old Timer



Location
UK
Posts
1640
Posts Per Day
0.67
Nicely written, the ultimate party from hell out of nothing. I liked the nth degree stuff like the chef appearing, I think you could juice up the humor by adding a few more crazy elements like this in.

The ending is okay, but I'd try and tie in the ending to that film as well he was trying so hard to avoid. If that was indavertantly spoiled as well, that would be the icing on the (prawn) cake.


For more of my scripts, stories, produced movies and the ocassional blog, check out my new website. CLICK
Logged Offline
Site Private Message Reply: 2 - 6
Don
Posted: January 11th, 2020, 10:00am Report to Moderator
Administrator
Administrator


So, what are you writing?

Location
Virginia
Posts
13495
Posts Per Day
1.95
Optioned via SimplyScripts


Visit SimplyScripts.com for what is new on the site.


-------------
You will miss 100% of the shots you don't take.
- Wayne Gretzky
Logged
Site Private Message Reply: 3 - 6
eldave1
Posted: January 11th, 2020, 11:35am Report to Moderator
Of The Ancients



Location
Southern California
Posts
5186
Posts Per Day
2.59
Excellent - congrats!


My Scripts can all be seen here:

http://dlambertson.wix.com/scripts
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 4 - 6
AnthonyCawood
Posted: January 11th, 2020, 12:46pm Report to Moderator
Old Timer



Location
UK
Posts
3043
Posts Per Day
1.34
Well done, congrats!


Anthony Cawood - Award winning screenwriter
Available Short screenplays - http://www.anthonycawood.co.uk/short-scripts
Available Feature screenplays - http://www.anthonycawood.co.uk/feature-film-scripts/
Screenwriting articles - http://www.anthonycawood.co.uk/articles
IMDB Link - http://www.imdb.com/name/nm6495672/?ref_=fn_al_nm_1
Logged Offline
Site Private Message Reply: 5 - 6
MarkRenshaw
Posted: January 14th, 2020, 3:02am Report to Moderator
Old Timer



Location
UK
Posts
1640
Posts Per Day
0.67
Nice one, congratulations!


For more of my scripts, stories, produced movies and the ocassional blog, check out my new website. CLICK
Logged Offline
Site Private Message Reply: 6 - 6
 Pages: 1
Recommend Print

Locked Board Board Index    Short Comedy Scripts  [ previous | next ] Switch to:
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login

Forum Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post polls
You may not post attachments
HTML is on
Blah Code is on
Smilies are on


Powered by E-Blah Platinum 9.71B © 2001-2006