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Mate-ing by Robert Spence - Short, Comedy - Two twenty something friends, Mark and Nat, maneuver their way through the contemporary dating scene with disastrous results. 11 pages - pdf format
Yeah this one made me chuckle. Nice and easy to visualise, has something of an 80's comedy vibe to it. I would say though to include flashback where he's talking about what happened next with Becky just so it's really clear...
Yeah no problem. I have just started with SimplyScripts and posted my first screenplay recently, it's called Fur and no Whiskers and it's a comedy/drama, feel free to check it out if you'd like.
It’s a nice little short you have here. Refreshing in its simplicity, not trying too hard or coming across pretentious at all which I like. And some nice little details like the Aldi bag haha. Good stuff.
Feedback wise I’d echo what Alexander said, plus I’d suggest having a possible touch up on the scene where Nat is reading from the phone just to help with clarity, as that part I had to read twice just to make sure I understood. It’s no biggy though to be fair.