The Stink Of It All by Roberto Negron - Short, Drama - A boy living in the housing projects feels that he's too big for bars on his windows, so he decides to take them down and quickly discovers that a small child falling to his or her death is not the only reason to keep the bars in place. 4 pages - pdf, format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Couple of quick notes:

Quoted Text STREET KID #1 Am I supposed to be scared of you because you’re black or something?! You don’t scare me, motherfucker! Let’s go.

Was the other guy white? You may want to intro their ethnicity when you first intro the characters.

Quoted Text ROBERTO Stupid things! What are these window guards still doing here anyway? I’m not a damn baby anymore. It’s not like I’m gonna be falling to my death. Roberto shakes the window guard. ROBERTO (CONT’D) You know what?! The hell with this! These window guards are coming down. This is ridiculous.

Had a problem with the above dialogue. Thought it was way to on the nose and didn't sound at all like a nine year old.

As I read on - none of the dialogue for Roberto sounds natural to me. He talks like a man.

Not sure what the street fight had to do with anything.

Sorry - didn't care for this one. Might just be me. Best of luck.